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2:08 AM, Sunday January 1st 2023
2 Pages of Organic Arrows
they need more perspective (get smaller as they recede from us and bigger as they come forward) and overlap.
Let the curves overlap each other as they come forward. It will feel uncomfortable to draw. exaggerate these features of perspective. his example had 6 arrows, aim to get at least the same number of forms in your submission as his example or more. slow down with shading, each line should be its own line, not a zig zagging zingle stroke.
1 Page of Organic Forms with Contour Ellipses
these look pretty good. most ellipses are perpendicular to the major axis of the form. there is some good overlapping ellipses that are selling the illusion of depth on the right.
1 Page of Organic Forms with Contour Curves
i think these look good too--some of them have too many contours though that are redundant. the lower right one is missing its central axis. there could be more variety in the depths of the ellipses/contours. the lack of changing width of the contours makes these forms look like they are isometrically drawn which is not what Uncomfortable would say is correct. but i think you did a good job getting most contours to touch the outer edge of the form.
1 Page of Texture Analyses
i think you gradate the textures out well but each texture kind of looked similar to each other, maybe because you chose similar things or lack of observation. really take your time with texture;there is a lot there for the mind to process. could use a bit more detail in some areas.
2 Pages of Dissections
fill the page--there is too much white space. making the forms bigger will make adding detail easier too. more darkness at the edges and lessening of detail towards the center of the forms is needed to make it seem like the form has light shining on it. Turtle shell is hard, i also tried turtle shell and i was not successful--the forms of the turtle shell should effect the silhouette more and raise up out of that sausage form. your skin texture looks good, it does the thing with light i was talking about, darker/more details around the edges and less/none in the center. a lot of your centers look good and you improved over time. your feathers have good silhouettes but look sort of hard, more like scales. Web does a good job wrapping around the form.
4 Pages of Form Intersections
you think you dont know what you are doing but you did the exercise just fine. Uncomfortable wrote that the focus of this exercise was not the intersections but just to get the forms all with shallow perspective and like they could exist together. in the furst page, your box on the upper right side is very slanted but the other boxes look like they have integrity and work well together. on your second page some of these forms feel like their perspective is not shallow enough; some forms look too stretched. work on pyramids and specifically pyramids that could fit in a cube or close to it. i had the same issue where some of my pyramids didnt feel equilateral or like right pyramids with 90 degree perpendicular centers in relation to their bases. only shade the faces that face the viewer, some of your faces seem to be on the otherside of the form but you shaded them which makes them feel like they face us.. i think you have some pretty good looking cylinders and rounded forms but sometimes the cylinders ends are very different in scale---giving them a similar scale will help make the perspective feel more shallow as Uncomfortable wanted here.
2 Pages of Organic Intersections
i think these look really good too-- you did not make the forms too complex and they do appear to be sausages. i guess my only suggestion would be to deflate the sausages more so they appear saggy and more sad, and also make the shadows wrap around the forms they are on top of more--- those shadows will really become quite distorted if we think of our light source being straight above. you are missing shadows that should be on the table/ground and being casted by the lowest form. the sausages look good though, i can tell you did well in the previous lessons because your ellipses hit the contours pretty consistently.
Next Steps:
lesson 3 will reiterate on the organic arrows otherwise i would recommend trying that again. you need to use more of the space on the page---reduce white space, every form should almost be touch each other. make it all count, put your best effort forward.
form intersections is just an intro, and its hard, dont be too worried about it. if you have the means, play with a 3d modeling software like blender to see how primitive shapes intersect. this is something i do in my job and i felt it helped and made the intersections fun for me.
3:18 PM, Sunday January 1st 2023
Thank you so much! I'll make sure to work on all of the things you mentioned and i really appreciate how detailed you were!
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