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9:55 AM, Friday April 2nd 2021
Hi! Here's my critique of your work.
Lines
Superimposed Lines
No problems with it, most of your lines only frayed towards the end (and not the start), which is the intended goal. Except for just two of them, though they're just minor errors since you seemed to get the hang of it otherwise.
Overall, it's pretty solid for the most part.
Ghosted Lines/Planes
Remember that you should always prioritize confidence over accuracy when executing/ghosting your lines (even if it overshoots), because it's better to have a smooth line than a wobbly/bent one in many cases.
Here from the Ghosted Lines, I've circled some lines with quite a noticeable wobble in them.
Here from the Ghosted Planes, I've circled some lines with an arch in them. Try to use your shoulder pivot to draw your lines, but if it still persists, you can try to draw that arching line consciously to the opposite direction.
Ellipses
For your ellipses as a whole, I found that most of them were a bit messy. See here. Your ellipses' lines should be "tightening" in on each other, as well as being even. (meaning that, for example, if you folded your ellipse in half, both sides would look the same) See the bottom part.
Your ellipses should be bound within their respective boxes/tables and not going out of them. For the planes, your ellipses should try to be fitting on all four corners. This one's almost fine as an example, but these two did not hit all of the corners.
For the ellipse table, each ellipse should be touching one another, without overlapping, shown here.
They should also be kept within the bounds, like mentioned before, shown here. I've also made another example to remember to have your ellipse touch together (there's a space inbetween the 2nd and 3rd ellipse)
Similarly to lines, remember to draw your ellipses confidently, (confidence and smoothness, over accuracy).
As for your ellipses in funnels, the minor axis (line in the middle) should be cutting all ellipses into two symmetrical halves. Besides that, try to have them fit within the ellipse without going out of it, or overlapping. See here.
Boxes
Organic Perspective
No problems with it.
Rough Perspective
Since some of your pependicular lines missed the vanishing point, just remember that you can ghost as many times as you need when planning your dots out.
Rotated Boxes/Organic Perspective
For Rotated Boxes, I'm not sure why the upper left part was missing a box, compared to this, but I'll assume it was just a minor oversight, just remember to include it if you plan on doing the Rotated Boxes again as a warmup.
There are some errors while drawing the rotated boxes in 3 Point Perpective from the Rotated Boxes and Organic Perspective, but it's fine, you'll be moving on to the 250 Box Challenge soon which will help you get used to that concept.
Next Steps:
As mentioned just before the end, move on to the 250 Box Challenge, you can work on your ellipses (or any of the other previous challenges) as part of your warm up. For ghosting, you'll be able to practice more of it during that challenge as well since you'll have to draw those boxes without a ruler.
All the best! If you need clarification, feel free to tell me, this is my first time doing such critiques.
12:24 AM, Saturday April 3rd 2021
Thank you for this critique! I'm new to Drawabox so getting insight on what I could improve on and where to go next is very helpful.
As for ellipses, I see what you mean with them not fitting snugly into their intended area and being wobbly. I struggled with drawing them throughout the lesson and getting the continuous motion down, continuing to practice them for warm-ups sounds like a good idea. (I'm tempted to re-watch the video on them too but I don't know if that constitutes as grinding)
The 250 Box Challenge sounds like a good opportunity to consolidate my mark making and perspective skills, hopefully I move onto that soon. Again, thanks for taking the time to look at my work.
7:22 AM, Saturday April 3rd 2021
Hi again! Before you move onto the 250 Box Challenge:
Also, if I may, regarding your boxes in the Rotated Boxes and Organic Perspective, I found that some of your lines were diverging (moving away) or parallel from each other (instead of converging, coming close to each other to a particular vanishing point) You can see this picture for what I mean.
This website may give you an idea of what a box in 3D space looks like, you can play around with it to get an idea of what converges look like with 3 Point Perspective (which you'll be drawing with as your boxes).
Also, remember that when drawing 3 Point Perspective, the initial Y angle should be over 90 degrees.
I would also suggest redoing the Rotated Boxes homework some time, since you skipped some boxes, but you can do it after the Challenge.
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