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12:28 PM, Tuesday October 5th 2021

Hello cheeseneeps, I hope you are well,

Stuff that you did well

  • You vary the distance of vanishing points and proportion of boxes. Exploring like you do here allows us to meet more interesting situations where we need to use concepts learned earlier and we learn faster this way,

  • You extend the lines in a proper direction, which tells me that you grasped this aspect of a box checking that some people miss,

  • Your line making skill also improved throughout the challenged, your line become more straight and confident compared to your first boxes,

  • You space out your hatching evenly. There are few boxes that feel rushed in terms of hatching, but the majority of them feel solid and spaced out, so keep in mind to be patient with it.

Things to work on in the future

  • Don't repeat your lines. Even if you made a bad line, leave it as if it were the correct one. Next time you make a line, remember what mistake you made the previous time and try to not repeat it again. Repeating our lines will make our drawing messy and encourage bad habits

  • Sometimes your lines converge in pairs, https://imgur.com/KSHwTwo this is what you do sometimes, we don't want that because we want all our 4 lines to meet in the same point, a vanishing point, as shown here https://imgur.com/8PqQLE0. That says to me that you perhaps lost your initial vanishing point. This diagram should also help you understand the angles of lines converging to the vanishing point. The inner lines have a smaller degree unless our box is long and it also depends on the position of our vanishing point. I want you to remember that our lines should always converge in one point, vanishing point, but they never meet in pairs.

In summary, you did a fairly good job, your lines and boxes are improving. That said, I want you to make 10 more boxes, as I want you to address your problem with converging in pairs. You are on the right track, but I believe you will gain greatly from those 10 boxes. Reply to this critique with additional boxes.

If you have any question feel free to ask,

Have fun during your journey,

Next Steps:

Please, do 10 more boxes

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
6:26 PM, Monday October 11th 2021

Hello Rivgar,

I completed two extra pages of boxes as you requested, and I did my best to specifically focus on the getting the lines to match up towards the imagined vanishing point. Still a little difficult, but I feel as though it's getting easier.

Anyways, I really do appreciate the critique, I'll be sure to keep it in mind and reference back to it from time to time.

Again, thank you for your time! And best of luck to you as well!

Here is the link: https://imgur.com/a/ANJycS5

8:57 PM, Monday October 11th 2021

Hello,

Those are looking way better, your lines converge quite nicely there. They could see more work, but that is passable for this challenge. Also remember to think that our lines should meet in pairs as this still happens.

There are also a few places where you try to fix your mistakes by repeating lines. Don't do that, even if our line is wrong, treat it as if it were correct. So we don't fall into bad habits.

I will mark this lesson as complete, even though there are few really minor mistakes happening here and there, I believe you will get over them in a warmups.

Next Steps:

Continue to lesson 2

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