View Full Submission View Parent Comment
0 users agree
4:42 PM, Monday January 10th 2022

Hello I'll be taking a look at your lesson 1 homework.

Lines

-Starting with the superimposed lines you are doing a great job here, you always start at a clearly defined point and keep the wavering on one side, your lines look pretty straight and confident. They show some arching which means that you need more practice to get comfortable when drawing from your shoulders.

-Moving on to the ghosted lines, here your linework is looking good, a little arching and very little wobbliness in some cases, keep in mind that once you have put the pen on the paper you have to fully commit to your lines and do not try to adjust their trajectory, but overall you are doing fine.

-The ghosted planes are really no different from the ghosted lines, here your linework is looking solid.

Ellipses

-Starting with the tables of ellipses, you are doing an excellent job. I can see that you have kept in mind the angle, degree and size, and keep pushing yourself to draw from your shoulder, especially the smaller ellipses.

-I like to see that you have prioritized drawing even and elliptical shapes in the planes, you are not really concerned with having your ellipses touch the four sides of the plane which is good. Although accuracy is our end goal it can't really be forced and tends to come with mileage and consistent practice more than anything else.

-Your funnels are looking great, all of your ellipses fit snugly within the funnel shape and don’t spill out, you also nailed the alignment of each ellipse, you are off to a great start with your ellipses, so just keep practicing.

Boxes

-Starting with the rough perspective you have kept the confident linework which helped your boxes to look more solid and believable, that said I can notice a tendency to redraw some lines, this is a habit that you have to get rid of. One of the points about using ink for your drawings and exercises is to build discipline and respect for each of your marks.Try and stick with the initial line you put down even if it's a bit off. Adding more lines just makes things messier and harder to read.

-Your rotated boxes turned quite well, you kept in mind the rotation and each quadrant is more or less equal, the gaps between boxes are consistent. My only piece of criticism here is that you could try to use more space, when doing these exercises in spatial reasoning using as much space as possible helps quite a bit and makes it easier to engage your whole arm when doing our marks.

-Finishing with the organic perspective, you are also correcting your mistakes here. I suggest you spend more time ghosting and thinking about how you are going to execute each of your marks to the best of your ability.

Overall this was a really solid submission that showed a nice deal of growth. Your line confidence and ellipses are both coming along nicely. I think you are understanding most of the concepts these lessons are trying to convey quite well. I'm going to mark this as complete and good luck with the 250 box challenge. Keep up the good work!

Next Steps:

250 Box Challenge.

This community member feels the lesson should be marked as complete. In order for the student to receive their completion badge, this critique will need 2 agreements from other members of the community.
12:56 PM, Thursday January 13th 2022

thanks for the critique, it is very helpfull. i will take it into account.

The recommendation below is an advertisement. Most of the links here are part of Amazon's affiliate program (unless otherwise stated), which helps support this website. It's also more than that - it's a hand-picked recommendation of something I've used myself. If you're interested, here is a full list.
Cottonwood Arts Sketchbooks

Cottonwood Arts Sketchbooks

These are my favourite sketchbooks, hands down. Move aside Moleskine, you overpriced gimmick. These sketchbooks are made by entertainment industry professionals down in Los Angeles, with concept artists in mind. They have a wide variety of sketchbooks, such as toned sketchbooks that let you work both towards light and towards dark values, as well as books where every second sheet is a semitransparent vellum.

This website uses cookies. You can read more about what we do with them, read our privacy policy.