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5:39 PM, Saturday June 19th 2021

Hello and congrats on completing lesson one. I'll be taking a look at your submission today. Starting with your superimposed lines these are off to a fine start. You are keeping a clearly defined starting point with all of your wavering at the opposite end. I'm noticing that you are getting bit of wobble in your ghosted lines and planes. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/9/wobbling This is also present in some of the later exercises although I am seeing improvement with your final exercise but I still want to mention this advice here so you can understand what the problem likely is.

This is the important part we need to be focusing on and the real problem I'm seeing:

You're hesitating as you execute the line, rather than drawing with a confident motion. Finally committing to a mark can definitely be quite daunting, but it's integral that you get used to accepting that mistakes do happen. Things go wrong - you can prepare as much as possible (and you should) but the moment your pen touches the page, any opportunity to avoid a mistake has already passed. Now you must commit yourself, push through with confidence, and execute your line. It's also worth remembering: we can still work with a line that is smooth and even, but there's not much that can be done with a wobbly one.

What's most likely happening is that you are worrying about accuracy too much while making your mark and it's causing you to slow down your stroke to compensate which is giving you a bit of wobble in your lines. The other possibility is that you aren't ghosting your lines or you are reverting back to drawing from your wrist on occasion. I can't be entirely sure of which specific thing is happening and it even could be combinations of all of them.

Your tables of ellipses are coming along pretty good. You are doing a good job drawing through your ellipses and focusing on consistent smooth ellipse shapes. This is carried over nicely into your ellipses in planes. It's great that you aren't overly concerned with accuracy and are instead focused on getting smooth ellipse shapes. Although accuracy is our end goal it can't really be forced and tends to come with mileage and consistent practice more than anything else. Your ellipses in funnels are having some issues with tilting off the minor axis. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/13/notaligned This is something you should always start considering when drawing your ellipses. Your ellipses are off to a fine start but there's still plenty of room for improvement when it comes to accuracy and consistent shape so keep practicing them during your warmups.

The plotted perspective looks great, nothing to mention here. Your rough perspective exercises turned out okay. You are getting a mix of confident linework here along with some wobble creeping back into some of your lines. Once again this is probably happening because you are more concerned with accuracy now that you are constructing boxes and you are slowing down your stroke to compensate. You are doing a good job extending the lines back on your boxes to check your work. As you can see some of your perspective estimations were quite off but that will become more intuitive with practice.

One thing that can help you a bit when doing a one point perspective exercise like this is to realize that all of your horizontal lines should be parallel to the horizon line and all of your verticals should be straight up and down. This will help you avoid some of the slanting lines you have in your constructions.

Your rotated box exercise turned out decently. The biggest problem I'm seeing here is that you should have just drawn this a lot bigger. Drawing bigger really helps when dealing with complex spatial problems. You did a good job drawing through your boxes and keeping your gaps narrow and consistent. You are running into a pretty common issue of not actually rotating your boxes in some cases but instead simply drawing them moving back in perspective. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/16/notrotating This is a great exercise to come back to after a few lessons to see how much your spatial thinking ability has improved. Your organic perspective exercises are looking pretty good. You seem to be getting more comfortable using the ghosting method and drawing from your shoulder for confident linework which is great but I'm still seeing the occasional wobbly linework but this was a good improvement overall. Your box constructions definitely could use some work so the 250 box challenge will be a great next step for you.

Overall this was a pretty good submission that showed a nice deal of growth. Your line confidence and ellipses both showed improvement as you worked through these exercises but I'd like to see a bit more consistency in your line quality and confidence while constructing boxes before moving on. So I'd like you to do one more page of the rough perspective boxes with a focus on confident linework. Make sure you are always ghosting your lines multiple times and then drawing from your shoulder with confidence. Once you get that revision submitted I'll take a look and you can most likely move on to the 250 box challenge.

Next Steps:

One page of the Rough Perspective Exercises - Focus on confident linework

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
7:24 PM, Sunday June 20th 2021

Thanks for the feedback!

https://imgur.com/a/LAdzMSC

7:54 PM, Sunday June 20th 2021

Hi,

Your linework is fine but you didn't extend your lines back to check your work. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/15/step6 When you are asked to do a revision that means doing the exercise completely. So can you please finish this and then I'll mark this as complete and you can move on to the 250 box challenge.

Next Steps:

Finish your page of the rough perspective exercise by extending the lines back to check your work. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/15/step6

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
3:16 AM, Monday June 21st 2021

Sorry about that. Here is the completed revision.

https://imgur.com/a/6Q4q40a

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