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10:09 AM, Sunday October 25th 2020
edited at 10:41 AM, Nov 3rd 2020

Arrows

Looking pretty confident and clean in general, the only issue I can catch is that you aren't making the arrows grow as much as they should as they get closer to the viewer. Try to exaggerate it more exponentially.

Organic forms

On the organic forms you're almost there, but you still have some forms that don't adhere to the specific form we're aiming for. Some of yours bulge a bit, others are a bit squished, and others are a bit pointy. I know it's hard, but keep trying to get as close as this specific form as you can.

Another thing is that you aren't shifting some of the ellipses degrees in some of the organic forms. Keep in mind that even if the sausages are straight the degrees will still change. Here's an example.

Textures

Pretty good job in general here. Just one thing to keep in mind. There are some places where you've outlined forms, such as on the plant thingy part of the pineapple. On this exercise you can only outline forms when they're part of the silhouette. If they're inside the silhouette you can only rely on drawing their cast shadows.

Another thing that might help is to approach all of the shadows like this. There are some places where you've relied on lines a bit, and this helps by forcing you to stop thinking on lines and to think only on shapes.

Form intersections

A few things:

-Some of the boxes are diverging. Be as careful as you can on each box so this doesn't happen.

-You're repeating some of the lines of the forms. Even if your line goes wrong don't repeat it. Repeating it will only make the drawing messier.

-The main objective of this exercise is to draw forms with consistent foreshortening. You've done a few boxes with pretty extreme foreshortening which differs from the other forms around them. To help fix this, try to focus only on shallow foreshortening forms, it'll make it a lot easier.

Other than that good job!

Organic intersections

They're looking pretty solid in general, just a few things:

-Here just as in the organic forms exercise you're doing forms a bit more complex that they should be. Squished, some too long, some pinching a bit, etc. Just like I mentioned before, stick to the simple forms described here.

-You should stick to drawing forms through, like you did in the first page. This will make them be a bit harder to read, but you can make it more readable by adding lineweight to the overlaps of the forms.

Like I said, pretty good job overall. Congratulations on finishing lesson 2 and good luck with lesson 3, keep it up!

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Lesson 3

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edited at 10:41 AM, Nov 3rd 2020
8:23 AM, Tuesday November 3rd 2020

Thank you for your wonder critique. I appreciate you taking the time to look over my submission and write this!

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