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7:36 PM, Saturday May 15th 2021
For you superinposed lines, you appear to be arching your lines a bit. Also, I would recommend doing only C or S sapes for your archs. Overall, you did a good job on these.
For your ghosted lines and planes, I feel that although they are a little wobbly, the idea of being confident and following through with your lines was there.
Your two tables of elipses are very good, no comment here other than you might want to use a ruler or straight edge for making the boundaries and not freehand those.
For the funnels exercise, it looks like you did not rotate your elipsess. The one in the center is supposed to be skinnier to appear like it is more to the side than the lines on the edges which get wider to show that we can see more of the side of them. For you, the width appears to be proportional to the size and is not accurately getting wider or being skinny enough to show rotation.
The plotted perspective is very good, no comments here.
For the rough perspective boxes your lines are a bit wobbly and the boxes were not correctly marked with the red lines. You have drawn all your red lines to connect to the single point but they are not supposed to go there. Instead, the red lines are supposed to follow the line that you drew to the horizon line and show how far off you were from hitting the point you were aiming for.
On the rotated boxes, although it feels like some of them may not be rotated correctly, I think you grasped the idea of rotating the boxes, so good job on this one. Same thing with the Organic Perspective, I think you did a good job on it.
Edit: I have edited this post after looking at other submissions and critiques from others. I feel that I was a bit too harsh with my judgement of the wobbliness on the ghosted lines and planes. I do however feel that the you lost some of this confidence and got more wobbly on some of your Rough Perspective boxes. This could be though due to rushing on the assignment, i am not sure. Moving forward, I do think that you should redo the funnels exercise and maybe the rough perspective just to make sure that you are doing the assignment properly and understand the concepts behind them. But otherwise, I think that you did a good job on this can move forward after doing those 2 exercises correctly.
Note: Sorry if I was a bit harsh with my wording, I did not mean to be.
Next Steps:
Overall I think you did a good job, but I feel like some core concepts were missed. I would recommend revisiting the Ghosted lines and planes exercises to focus on achieving the confident mark making. I am not too worried about the Arched lines in the superimposed lines as i didn't notice them in other exercises. I would also recommend revisiting the funnels exersize as the elipses do not appear to be rotating. If anyone disagrees with my critique, please correct my suggestions.
2:40 PM, Sunday May 16th 2021
Thanks! Tbh i felt kinda lucky that i even got a critique this fast. Just asking to be sure, you're advising me to re-do the funnels and the ghosted lines and planes exercises, or is it the rough perspective and the funnels?
2:50 PM, Sunday May 16th 2021
My pleasure, and sorry for the confusion. I was unable to edit my "Next Steps:" so what I am advising is to redo the funnels and atleast 1 page of the rough perspective just because the directions were not followed correctly. So when you redo these, you will want to look back through the instructions again and make sure that you are doing the assignment correctly. For the funnels you will want to look at the concept of rotating the circle (watch the video and read the text), and for the rough perspectiveyou will want to make sure you are drawing your red lines to the correct spots. I am not asking you to redo the ghosted planes or lines so do not worry about that.
3:07 PM, Monday May 24th 2021
Sorry that it took me a quite a while to do this, but here are my redos.
The ellipses in my funnels
(don't mind the sentence above, the edit's a bit buggy so i couldn't remove it)
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