This is Uncomfortable - I hijacked your account in order to cancel your new Lesson 4 homework submission, and am posting your revisions here. https://imgur.com/a/a7YJhTB
It seems you attempted to submit your revisions as a full lesson submission. Note that as mentioned at the bottom of the critique (in admittedly small text) revisions are sent in as a simple reply to the critique unless otherwise stated. This is because those revisions are included in the cost of the original critique.
I have canceled your attempted submission, which will have refunded the 2 credits to your account, and will critique your revisions below.
In my original critique, I called out a few issues - I'll mention whether or not they've been addressed one by one:
I mentioned that your second page wasn't sticking as well to the characteristics of simple sausages. These are somewhat better (more in line with the first page from your initial submission), although there is room for improvement. You tend to make them get wider through the midsection, and you also tend to have ends of different sizes - for example, this one and this one definitely have ends of considerably different sizes. This comes up to a lesser degree on some of the others as well.
I mentioned that the degree of your contour lines was either somewhat arbitrary, or too consistent (sticking to the same degree/width) throughout the entire length of the sausage form. This is by and large still the case, although you also have a number of cases where the contour curves get narrower until they hit the middle of the form, and then start widening again, but without reversing their direction. For example, this one, which is also incorrect.
There are a variety of different ways in which a sausage's contour lines can be drawn, and some do end up with the narrowest contour curve in the middle - but the direction of those curves will then reverse themselves. Here you can see the different configurations that are possible for the same sausage. The bottom two show this kind of reversal. Note how they occur in two situations - one where both ends face towards the viewer (as noted by the ellipses at the ends), and one where neither end faces the viewer. What we see in this one of yours is technically possible if the form is actually bending a lot in 3D space, with the bottom part coming out towards the viewer, but I do not believe you did this intentionally.
When it comes to understanding how these degrees work, I did point you to the Lesson 1 ellipses video which explains this concept with props. If you have not watched it, I strongly urge you to.
I should also call out that this one's contour curves suggest that both ends are facing the viewer, though you've only placed an ellipse on one end. The ellipse at the tip is no different from the other contour curves, except that with this tip facing the viewer, we're able to see the whole contour line all the way around, rather than just a partial curve.
As a whole, I do not feel that you completely understand how these contour curves work, and so I am going to have to ask for one more page of this exercise. Again - submit it as a reply to this critique, not as a new submission.
Next Steps:
Please submit one more page of organic forms with contour curves.
Hello,
I took a 3 week break but I'm at it again.
I made sure to try and properly draw the sausages. I think that it's better but you'll be the judge of that.
For the contour curves, I based most of it from here.
Cheers.
Edit: I forgot to send the link to the submission. https://imgur.com/MEG2laO
These are looking much better! As such, I'll go ahead and mark this lesson as complete - though be sure to go back over the previous feedback you'd received, as it's easy to forget even when not taking a 3 week break in between.
Next Steps:
Move onto lesson 5.
A lot of my students use these. The last time I used them was when I was in high school, and at the time I felt that they dried out pretty quickly, though I may have simply been mishandling them. As with all pens, make sure you're capping them when they're not in use, and try not to apply too much pressure. You really only need to be touching the page, not mashing your pen into it.
In terms of line weight, the sizes are pretty weird. 08 corresponds to 0.5mm, which is what I recommend for the drawabox lessons, whereas 05 corresponds to 0.45mm, which is pretty close and can also be used.
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