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6:26 PM, Monday February 3rd 2020

While I normally would recommend that you fill out your pages to resemble the example homeworks at the end of each assignment page, the only one that I see an issue with (with that specific problem) is plotted perspective-which you were only supposed to do 1 page, but have about 10-15 boxes between the three frames. You did 2 pages, 1 box per frame, so 6 boxes in total. Someone else may disagree, but I think plotted perspective is an exercise that I could let slide.

More importantly, there are some things to take note of in your other assignments!

Right off the bat your superimposed lines are alright. Some of the early ones experience double fraying (indicating that you weren't taking the time to put your pen down on the one starting point with each of the 8 extra lines), but page 2 solves that problem. Your initial ghosted lines experience some accuracy problems, but based on your ghosted planes and later boxes, you've more or less conquered the most glaring accuracy issues.

Your ellipses are nice, but try to keep it to 2 passes per ellipse. I often see more than 4 passes on many of yours, which results in messy ellipses. Your tables of ellipses seem to show some distortion from the even circular shape, so do your best to focus on an even circle rather than an accurate one that hits all the corners. The ellipses in planes do this well, so I'm mostly mentioning it in case it wasn't something you were aware of!

When it comes to your perspective exercises (the most relevant for the 250 box challenge), keep in mind that if your original dot is off, you are allowed and even encouraged to move it! Make new dots until you have a dot that does the job you need it to do!

Finally, your organic perspective boxes seem to ignore the rules of perspective. The exercise is not some little boxes in front of bigger boxes, as you seem to have drawn, but rather semi-translucent boxes that are all about the same size that get smaller along the squiggly line you've drawn. If a box is big, it's in front of a box that is small. And, you do want to see the entirety of all the boxes, even the ones in the background. You'll definitely want to refer to the example homeworks for this. So, to make sure that you get the point of the exercise, I think I would want you to do at least one more frame of organic perspective, with all of your boxes fully drawn, and the visible lines (a line that is not obscured by another box) emphasized with a single superimposed line.

Overall though good job on completing the lesson and good luck with your 250 box challenge!

Next Steps:

1 more individual frame of organic perspective unless someone else thinks you should do a full page!

Also, go ahead and get started on the 250 box challenge~

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
6:41 PM, Monday February 3rd 2020

Great points, thanks alot for taking the time to critique, means alot, organic perspective here i come!

3:42 AM, Wednesday February 5th 2020

https://m.imgur.com/a/es7D6pZ

hope this link is visible, thanks again for all the feedback

9:35 PM, Wednesday February 5th 2020

Absolutely excellent!! Your boxes get a little rectangular all there at the end but that's not a problem whatsoever. Again, best of luck with your 250 box challenge!

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