Finally completed lesson 1. Any feedback would be appreciated.
I also included a couple of warmups from later on (last 3 pages) because the way I hold my pen has changed throughout the lesson and I thought they might provide a more up to date idea of the way I draw.
Hey Fillipix! I am paperhat and I will be doing your lesson 1 critique.
My critique will be divided into three sections:
Lines
Super-imposed lines: Your lines are only fraying on one end and not on both, that is great! Your lines are also generally confident looking. Even your longer lines stay confident, only just a few are arching just a little. Arching might happen if you are not using your shoulder pivot. However, it might also happen if you use your shoulder pivot. In that case try to consciously arch in the opposite direction. Try to pay close attention on which pivot your are using.
Ghosted Lines: Here your lines are again generally confident looking. Here and there it looks like you were trying to correct your line in order to be more accurate. But remember: confidence over accuracy. One other thing I can notice, which you also do in the upcoming exercises, is to place very big dots. The dots for ghosting are really jsut meant to be dots and not circles, keep them tiny and discrete going forward.
Ghosted Planes: Your lines are generally confident, but sometimes a bit more arching than before. Watch out for that, especially because I can also spot some arching on your "new" work. You remembered to always put at dot at the beginning and the end of each line, this is crucial for the ghosting method. Great job!
Ellipses
Tables Of Ellipses: Most of your ellipses are smooth (confident) looking, however, some of them are quite wobbly. Probably because you tried to not under-/overshoot too much. However, same as for the lines, confidence over accuracy. You also repeat the ellipses 2 to 3 times, which is perfect. As for your "new" work, here your ellipses look more smooth and quite accurate. Nice improvement!
Ellipses in Planes: Your ellipses are over-/undershooting here and there, but that is totally fine. Especially because they are quite confident and smooth looking.
Funnels: You placed the minor axis correctly, cutting the ellipses in two halves! Here your ellipses look mostly confident and do not over/undershoot a lot. It seems that you have had most problems with the smaller, narrower ellipses. Be sure to also include such ellipses in your warm-ups in order to get more practice on them, you'll need them going forward (:
Boxes
Plotted Perspective: You draw through your boxes which is very good. Your hatching looks really neat and ordlery. Overall this is very nice looking!
Rough Perspective: You draw through all your boxes and use the line correction method. You keep the width lines are parallel to the horizon and height lines perpendicular to the horizon. Especially with this task your lines are quite archy. Really make sure your using your shoulder pivot and not your wrist and/or elbow.
Rotated Boxes: : You keep the corners between boxes close and try to rotate the boxes. However, the rotation is not enough. Your "cross" in the middle looks fine, but the rest is not nearly as rotated as it should be. Take a look again at this https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/17/step7 and at this picture https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/17/step8 . The difference you might notice is that your furthest corner is not "pressed down" enough and you have to "push it" further behind. You might also want to try some hatching and lineweight to make your boxes more prominent.
Organic Perspective: : You have a variety of box sizes and angles, which is great. You also tried overlapping some boxes. You could have used some lineweight in order to make more clear which box is in front of which. These images might help you with that: https://imgur.com/OHvr7Mb, https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/980a575e.jpg.
Overall your work is really solid and looks quite well! The only task you really struggled with, as most people do, is the ortated boxes one. I would like you do give that one another try before continuing with the 250 box challenge. Good luck!
Next Steps:
Where the rest of my recommendations tend to be for specific products, this one is a little more general. It's about printer paper.
As discussed in Lesson 0, printer paper (A4 or 8.5"x11") is what we recommend. It's well suited to the kind of tools we're using, and the nature of the work we're doing (in terms of size). But a lot of students still feel driven to sketchbooks, either by a desire to feel more like an artist, or to be able to compile their work as they go through the course.
Neither is a good enough reason to use something that is going to more expensive, more complex in terms of finding the right kind for the tools we're using, more stress-inducing (in terms of not wanting to "ruin" a sketchbook - we make a lot of mistakes throughout the work in this course), and more likely to keep you from developing the habits we try to instill in our students (like rotating the page to find a comfortable angle of approach).
Whether you grab the ream of printer paper linked here, a different brand, or pick one up from a store near you - do yourself a favour and don't make things even more difficult for you. And if you want to compile your work, you can always keep it in a folder, and even have it bound into a book when you're done.
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