Hello Irca, thank you for replying with your revisions.

To your points:

• The homework assignment for lesson 4 is for 2 pages of organic forms with contour curves. Your original submission contained 1 page of organic forms with contour curves, and 1 page of organic forms with contour ellipses. This isn't actually a big deal and on its own would not warrant revisions. You were assigned revisions on this exercise due to the combination of issues that were called out.

• Yes, I intended for you to follow the shrimp and lobster demos exactly as shown, without finding any other references to work from, so your approach was correct. I will try to make this clearer when assigning similar tasks in the future, and apologise for the confusion. If anything said to you in a critique is unclear or confusing you are allowed to ask questions. To be honest, the fact that Uncomfortable has already parsed through the huge amount of visual information present in a reference photo and simplified all that complexity into basic forms for you to follow along with should make your task much easier than working independently from your own reference, and the lobster demo is no more complex than the wasp demo (which I hope you have already followed along with).

• The original critique was, by necessity, quite dense, so you may have missed the praise that was offered. I noted that I was pleased to see evidence of you using the ghosting method and making an effort to try to stick to the principles of markmaking. I also mentioned that the branch construction you used as a foundation for your centipede worked fine. I have noted that you would prefer to have more examples of the things you do well to be called out, though keep in mind that in order to be able to offer these critiques at such a low minimum price, we do need to prioritise efficiency, and if there are a lot of points to cover there may be little time left for praise.

Moving on to your work, your organic forms with contour curves are much closer to simple sausage forms, you're keeping the ends evenly sized and the width more consistent. You've also done a good job of hooking (most of) your contour curves around the forms.

You don't appear to be shifting the degree of your contour curves wider as the form gets further from the viewer, so I suggest you reread that section of feedback and take a closer look at this diagram showing different ways we can vary the contour curves.

Next, let's take a look at your demo draw alongs. By and large, you've done quite well with these, I'm happy to see continued evidence of you using the ghosting method, planning and preparing your marks, and most of them are coming out smooth and confident. I'm happy to see you've drawn around the ellipses 2 full times before lifting your pen off the page.

I can see you've made an effort to follow the steps shown, though both your demos are missing some elements of leg construction. The first of these are the contour lines at the joints shown in step 5 of the shrimp demo, and step 5 and 6 of the lobster demo. This was also something I specifically pointed out in your original feedback, including this diagram. You can see these curves highlighted in red on this copy of the sausage method diagram. These little curves might seem insignificant, but defining the intersections between these forms is a very effective way to reinforce the solidity of the construction, so be sure to include them in future. The other aspect of leg construction you seem to have missed is all the additional forms added to the legs, in step 6 of the shrimp demo and step 8 of the lobster demo. It will often be necessary to add more forms to the sausage armatures to bring out the character of the leg in question, as seen in this ant leg demo I shared with you previously.

Moving onto the constructions done from your own references, there are a lot of significant improvements. Here are a few things you're doing well:

• You're starting your constructions with simple solid forms.

• You're "drawing through" most of your forms and establishing how they fit together in 3D space, instead of cutting them off where they pass behind something else, good work.

• There are places where you're building up your constructions in 3D, for example the eyes and antennae of this beetle are complete new forms with fully enclosed silhouettes that establish how they connect to the existing structures in 3D space.

And here are a couple of things I'd like you to continue to work on:

• Keep striving to only take actions on your constructions by adding in 3D. On your mosquito I've called out some examples where you're doing this well, and marked in blue where you'd extended the abdomen with a flat partial shape. I've also included a diagram showing how to build this with a complete form instead.

• I can see the intent to use the sausage method of leg construction on most of these pages, though you did not adhere to all of its specifics. In addition to the missing contour curves at the joints which I mentioned with your demo drawings, there are places where you don't appear to be sticking to simple sausage forms as closely as you showed you were able to when following the demos. I've marked out some of the leg construction issues on this beetle. Pay closer attention to the sausage method diagram, and the various demos and examples I shared with you previously.

Now, you'll have plenty of opportunities to practice these two points as you tackle your animal constructions in the next lesson, so I'll go ahead and mark this one as complete.

I recommend you take your shrimp and lobster demo draw-alongs and finish them off by adding the missing leg construction steps I pointed out. This should be a fairly straightforward task- open up the demos and copy over the missing contour curves and additional forms onto your work. This should help you get a stronger grasp of how to apply this construction method to your own work. Make sure you make every effort to apply the sausage method of leg construction throughout lesson 5, (refer to the diagrams and demos I've shared here to help you) so I don't end up repeating the same feedback in your next critique. Best of luck.