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2:23 PM, Sunday November 22nd 2020
Hey ASMAE, let's get right to it.
First of all a general tip:
Try to always make the best possible photos of your art.
It makes it easier to critique and more pleasing to look at. A good presentation is always worth it in my opinion.
If you have a scanner maybe try that or shoot the photos under daylight outside, which should ensure good lighting and no shaky/blurry pictures.
Now lets get to the critique:
Lines
In your Superimposed Lines, especially on the first page, I see a lot of fraying on both ends. Try to avoid that. Moving on to your Ghosted Lines I see on almost every line quite a strong tendency to arc your lines. More about that and how to avoid it here.
Ghosted Planes here the Photos make it a bit hard to tell, but what I see look alright. Sometimes a bit of overshooting but nothing too dramatic.
Ellipses
In your Tables of Ellipses you seemed to have some confidence issues. Your lines get shaky and the Ellipses uneven. Always value confidence more than accuracy. Meaning better miss the location with your Ellipses, rather than having them all wobbly. This is noticeable throughout all of your Ellipse work. Check this out: https://imgur.com/a/UUuCxK3.
It's getting a bit better in the Funnels but still...
Boxes
In the Plotted Perspective you place some of your boxes too close to the vanishing points leading to a bit of distortion but nothing to worry about too much. Explained here. In the Rough Perspective you didn't really apply any foreshortening aka perspective to your boxes, your lines are rather parallel than converging. The boxes in the Rotated Boxes aren't the same size and some of them don't actually rotate. The same problem from the Rough Perspective can be seen in the Organic Perspective but you'll work on these kinds of issues enough during the 250 Box Challenge.
Next Steps:
Before I send you into the 250 Box Challenge I would like you to additionally submit:
1 Page of Tables of Ellipses
1 Page of Ellipses in Planes
Read the instructions again and make sure to keep all of what I said in my critique and here: https://imgur.com/a/UUuCxK3 in mind.
Looking forward to your revisions.
See ya! ;)
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