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1:57 AM, Friday October 16th 2020

Hey there I'll be handling your lesson 2 critique.

I'll be listing any spots I believe you can improve in these exercises below. I will say that drawing large is actually preferred and beneficial in a lot of ways, you mention using more pages but you often have plenty of room on your pages still.

  • You have a few things worth noting when it comes to your arrows exercises. You aren't letting your arrows twist as often as they should, which results in bulging in certain spots. You can read more about letting your lines overlap here. You also aren't finishing all of your arrows, leaving the arrow heads or tail end pieces empty rather than drawing anything, in places you don't always hatch your curves either. Aside from that you could use foreshortening more in the negative space between the curves more, this helps sell the illusion of the arrow moving through 3D space, you can read more on that concept here.

  • The majority of your organic forms with contours were kept simple which is great, you do go a bit complex in some of them so just remember that you want to keep both ends of the sausage the same size, and avoid any pinching, bloating, or stretching along the length of the form. There are 2 spots you can improve in this exercise, the first being your contour lines and ellipses are quite stiff and not confidently drawn resulting in wobbling. The second being that you want to shift the degree of your contour along the length of the form. The degree of a contour line basically represents the orientation of that cross-section in space, relative to the viewer, and as we slide along the sausage form, the cross section is either going to open up (allowing us to see more of it) or turn away from the viewer (allowing us to see less), as shown here.

  • When it comes to the texture exercises you're focusing more on the outlines and negative space than the cast shadows created from forms along the texture itself. This results in you having difficulty properly applying gradients and your textures appearing quite flat. This exercise is difficult and requires a lot of mileage for most people to fully grasp so don't stress about it too heavily, just know that you will need to practice it to fully be comfortable doing it. By focusing on cast shadows we can imply information rather than explicitly drawing it all, this is useful when we have to create focal points in larger pieces. You can read more about the concepts here.

  • Your form intersections are well constructed for the most part. I'm glad you attempted to draw the intersections as well, right now this exercise is meant to get students to start thinking about how their forms relate to one another in 3D space, and how to define those relationships on the page. We'll be going over intersections more in the upcoming material so if you don't feel like you fully grasp them yet don't worry.

  • As for your organic intersections I'd suggest in the future to lay your forms perpendicularly as if you were trying to create an x when looking from above. Your forms often aren't really wrapping around one another in a way that makes sense so you have plenty of room to grow here which will come with mileage. As you build up your understanding of laying these forms on top of one another you'll find your understanding of 3D space will get stronger which will help in terms of working with light as well. Right now your shadows aren't really casting in any consistent way and are mostly just hugging the form they're being created by.

Overall while you have lots of room to grow, you did show an understanding of a lot of the core concepts here and you'll find plenty of improvement through more mileage and as you work on the upcoming material which will go more in depth regarding some of the trickier concepts introduced here.

I'll be marking your submission as complete and moving you on to lesson 3.

Good luck.

Next Steps:

Keep doing previous exercises as warm ups.

Move on to lesson 3.

This critique marks this lesson as complete.
12:07 PM, Friday October 16th 2020

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