Hello Catyoga, thank you for responding with your revisions, I hope you are feeling better.

Taking a look at your work I have to say you've made amazing progress. I can see you really took the feedback to heart and applied it with gusto. I'll go over the key points from before to highlight where you've done an amazing job, and a couple of things that can be improved further.

Markmaking

Looking between these and your original submission is like the difference between night and day. I can see you're thinking about your marks before you draw them, the vast majority of your lines look well planned and intentional and they're much much smoother. You've really pulled it off. I know it's not easy to accomplish clean lines, and I think you should be proud of what you have achieved here, well done.

Major masses

You've done a good job starting with your 3 major masses and connecting them together. Do remember to draw through your ellipses 2 full times before you lift your pen, even if you feel like you can nail them in a single pass we ask you to keep drawing through them all while you're doing your homework in this course.

The rib cage usually occupies roughly half of the torso length, so it is just a little bit short on this horse. Aside from that, your core construction looks good.

Leg construction

I can see you've made a great effort to apply the sausage method for constructing your legs. You're not applying it perfectly, which is understandable, as you weren't really using this method at all before and I don't expect you to nail everything all in one go.

So, there are two things you can do to apply the method more correctly. The first, I think you already spotted and corrected but I'll go over just in case. The forms you used for the legs of your first two constructions aren't really sticking to the characteristics of simple sausage forms, they're rather elliptical, swelling through their midsection instead of keeping a consistent width. You did a much better job of sticking to sausage forms for the legs of your last 3 constructions, well done.

The second point is that you seem to have missed the contour curve to reinforce the joints as shown in the diagram for the sausage method. I've added some of those missing intersections on one of your constructions here These little contour curves might seem insignificant but they do tell the viewer a lot of information about how the forms are orientated in space as well as reinforcing the structure of your legs by establishing how the forms connect together. So try to remember to include them in future. In some cases there wouldn't have been room to add the contour curve, even if you wanted to, so to remedy this make sure you have a healthy overlap between your sausage forms.

Additional masses

You're making good use of additional masses now. I can see that you're designing them carefully and some of them are spot on. You're still piling quite a few extra contour lines onto some of your additional masses. Please revisit my previous round of feedback, where I explained that your time is better invested into designing the shape of your masses to feel 3D without the need for extra contours. I've made some edits to a couple of your additional masses on your horse here as well as highlighting some masses that are excellent.

Head construction

Your head constructions are more solid than your previous attempts, I can see that you're working on applying the informal head demo to your work. I've marked on one of your heads here how to connect the eye sockets and the footprint for the muzzle together like puzzle pieces, without leaving any gaps.

Conclusion You've made huge improvements across the board! While there is some room for improvement, particularly in the application of the sausage method of leg construction, I think you're showing that you'll be able to continue to apply this feedback on your own. So, great work, I'll go ahead and mark this as complete.