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4:51 AM, Friday May 29th 2020
Congrats on finishing Lesson 1
I'll start by saying your line work is impressive and very consistent. Your line homework is good and it seems you understood the point of the exercises. Same with ellipses, great job.
For your box exercises it looks like you got the concept of VP and the relationship of parallel lines in a 3D cube. Your rotated box exercise also looks satisfactory.
On the organic perspective: While your cubes are consistent in quality they are also consistent in size, which doesn't give it much depth as the boxes closest should be larger. It's expected that some boxes won't line up well and as such some of yours appear distorted. Following the Y shape method helps as it shows the three lines that the rest of the box will line up with. This way you can avoid conflicting lines in your boxes. No need to worry since you'll be getting a lot of practice with the next part.
Next Steps:
Be sure to look over the page on foreshortening your boxes and move on to 250 Box Challenge.
11:00 PM, Friday May 29th 2020
Thanks for the critique on my work.
Surely, I'll try to improve the quality of boxes and the perspectives. Also I'll take care of conflicting lines and foreshortening in the boxes too and move on to next one.
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5:01 PM, Friday May 29th 2020
Hi, akshay_karanje.
Good job on finishing this lesson. Overall this is a very good submission.
Your superimposed lines are very good and well packed together. On some of your ghosted lines, I can notice some slight arching in them. Be sure to draw your lines with a shoulder motion. If you mix some elbow motion, your lines will definitely have a tendency to arch.
Your ghosted planes are very good, but you didn't plot your lines in every occasion, specially on the inner lines. Always plan your lines with dots, as this gives you a goal to draw to. Also, by checking how far away your lines are from the dots, you can easily identify your mistakes, which will help you improve.
Your ellipses are also good, and you did draw through them, but, more specifically on the ellipses in planes, I feel you went through them one time too many. Draw each ellipse 2 or 3 times at most.
Moving on to your boxes. You rough perspective is also very good and everything is well aligned with the horizon. Although not very noticeable, some of your lines are slightly wobbly. I feel this happened because you might have drawn them at a slower pace, in order to make sure they would each their destination. I'm certainly nitpicking here, because it's visible your lines are very well done.
Your rotated boxes are very clean and you did well keeping them packed together. I feel you could have pushed the rotation a bit further on the "corner" boxes, but, overall, you did a very good job here.
Now, your organic perspective is where I feel you struggled the most. Although the compositions are nice, you could have exaggerated the difference between the smaller and larges boxes, in order to better sell the illusion of depth. You could also have overlapped some more boxes and increased the line weight of the overlapping lines, to highlight which box is in front. Your line work here could also have been better, specially after seeing from your ghosted planes that you're able to draw straighter lines. At this stage it's more important to focus on getting smooth and confident lines, as accuracy with later come, if you keep practicing correctly. You did a good job making it seem that the boxes belong to the same 3D space, although some of the boxes perspective could have been better. This is not too worrisome here, because you'll have time to practice perspective during the next steps.
As I said before, your work here is overall very good. Don't forget to warm up with some of these exercises and good luck for the boxes challenge.
Next Steps:
250 boxes challenge.
10:50 PM, Friday May 29th 2020
First of all, thank you so much for critiquing my work as I requested. It's my pleasure to have you critique my work and I hope you'll guide me for my work and help me to reduce mistakes further from now too.
As you mentioned my lines have slight arching, I actually worked a lot on this even in past too. But after having understood how to use shoulder to draw lines I've improved a lot as compared to earlier. Now as you said, I'll try to reduce the elbow motion and focus on the shoulder motion.
About Ghosted planes, I'll practice planning the lines with dots and will also try to keep my line and the dots intact as those are far away from each other in some cases.
I'll practice drawing ellipses with 2-3 times at most.
You observed not only this mistake correctly, but also the reason behind it. That's very much impressive and I do respect that. I really slowed my pace while drawing lines here, in order to accomplish the desired destination for them, resulting in slightly wobbly lines. I'll make sure not to reduce the line quality in order achive the goal in any kind of situation.
Even though I didn't plotted or planned the inner lines of the ghosted planes, I did exactly opposite here in rotated boxes. I've actually planned each and every single line in order to rotate those boxes very well and keep them close enough so as to visualize the rotation of each box correctly and neatly, also evenly in every quadrant. I'll also give it a try to rotate those in the corners.
Here comes the part where I couldn't figure out what actually happened. Even I myself got so disappointed by seeing my work in the organic perspective. I actually could've done much better than this here. But then I remembered the words like "not to grind on to mistakes and move on", so I posted them as it is. I'll keep on practicing and will focus on to the points as you mentioned like illusion of deapth, highlighting the boxes in front, better line quality wth smooth and confident lines, accuracy and the perspectives and will also do the regular warm ups for further improvements.
Thank you so much again for such a great and detailed critique!
Apart from the exercises, I really want to apologize for the poor communication skill for the comments, as my native language isn't English primarily. So, my sentence formation and vocabulary is not that much good or you can say "formal". I just managed to form those on my own words. I can't actually communicate formally or as well as you do. At some point my sentences might seem different or may be rude from your perpective, but I mean nothing like that. I hope you'll understand.
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9:02 AM, Friday May 29th 2020
your organic perspective boxes are little bit bad..
but don't warry..
your line quality good ????..
move on 250 box challenge
Next Steps:
do the box challenge with 16 minutes line and circle warm up
10:55 PM, Friday May 29th 2020
Thank you for your critique.
I'll try to improve my organic perspective moving on to the 250 box challenge and will also warm up.
3:03 AM, Saturday May 30th 2020
ok best of luck
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