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3:48 PM, Thursday May 7th 2020
edited at 3:50 PM, May 7th 2020

I won’t ask why, but I will tell you that there’s a lot of really obvious mistakes in your boxes, that would’ve been pointed out to you if you had. Anyway, hello, and let’s take this one step at a time~

First things first, a lot of your correction lines are incorrect. Read about this here: https://drawabox.com/lesson/250boxes/1/wrongdirection Basically, if you’re using the Y method, the correction lines extend in the 3 directions of said Y. Ideally, they’d also converge in that direction... That brings us to mistake #2: a lot of these lines don’t actually converge- they diverge (i.e. head away from the viewer.) I was trying to find a box where they don’t do this, to show you as an example, but it’s very difficult to, because their foreshortening is quite shallow (another mistake.) There’s a few more mistakes, too, but we’ll deal with the more pressing ones first, before getting to them.

Next Steps:

So, what I think we should do is take things one step at a time. I’d like you to do 1 more page of boxes (5-6), all of which have dramatic foreshortening. What that means is that their vanishing points will not be far off into the distance, but close to them. So if you look at this section here: https://drawabox.com/lesson/250boxes/1/foreshortening you’re aiming for a box similar to the one on the left, not the one on the right.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
edited at 3:50 PM, May 7th 2020
11:01 AM, Friday May 8th 2020
edited at 11:02 AM, May 8th 2020

Thanks for this good critique - I've done the 1 more page you've asked for, what do you think about it?

edited at 11:02 AM, May 8th 2020
10:33 AM, Sunday May 10th 2020

Looks good! The correction lines are all going in the correct direction, too- well done! Try to make the boxes a little bigger next time, though. Don’t worry if there’s enough space for your correction lines- there is.

Next Steps:

So, next, I’d like to see the same thing, but with shallow foreshortening. Mind you, in not saying no foreshortening. The lines should still be converging, even at a glance, just to a lesser extent. If you think back to the image I posted, you’re now drawing a box similar to the one on the right.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
6:00 PM, Monday May 11th 2020
edited at 6:01 PM, May 11th 2020

I added the shallow foreshortening page here. Thanks for taking all this time to guide me

edited at 6:01 PM, May 11th 2020
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