4:26 PM, Tuesday February 11th 2020
I've got a number of things that should help:
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You're demonstrating a good sense of depth with your arrows, but the linework is definitely a little stiff and wobbly. Work on drawing with more confidence, and don't hesitate when your pen touches the page. You're hesitating because you're afraid of making a mistake, and the only way to get around that is to accept that mistakes happen, and that it's better to have a line that is smooth but inaccurate than one that is wobbly but accurate.
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It's good that you're sticking close to the simple structure of your leaves when adding edge detail, but watch the way you zigzag back and forth in the top left. You're breaking this rule from lesson 1. The lesson talks about this issue in the context of this exercise here.
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Definitely a lot of stiffness in your branches. Your linework was definitely better in many of your leaves, so you're certainly able to draw with more confidence - it's a psychological block that is keeping you from doing it here.
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Also, make sure you extend the segments of your branches halfway to the next ellipse, as mentioned in the exercise. This gives you more room to overlap it in your next segment, which helps have them flow together.
Moving onto your plant constructions,
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The big one on this page is a bit worrying. Remember that these lessons are all about constructing forms in space. When you end up drawing individual lines on the page, you're drawing in an entirely different way than these lessons demand.
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On the big one at the top of this page, you've actually done reasonably well but the biggest problem is that you've only drawn the visible portion of each petal. This makes you think about the marks you're drawing as they exist on the page, rather than as being individual forms existing in 3D space. In these lessons, you're supposed to draw each form in its entirety, as this gives you a better understanding of how it sits in space and how it relates to the other forms around it.
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Bottom left here is actually quite well done. Still have that stiff linework, but the construction is pretty good. Still gotta keep pushing yourself to draw through all your petal forms entirely though.
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Don't scribble. Scribbling is not texture.
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Towards the middle-left of this page you've got a petals there where you're jumping into complex shapes way too early. There isn't enough structure in place from previous phases of construction to support the complexity you've included here.
I think you may be getting ahead of yourself on this one, as you're showing a lot of issues that are addressed way back in lesson 1 (matters of line quality and smooth, confident execution). You also seem to be missing some important instructions throughout, either points mentioned in this lesson, or things mentioned back in lesson 2 (like no scribbling when trying to draw texture). The line quality is definitely the biggest concern here.
Are you keeping up with doing the exercises from previous lessons as part of a regular warmup routine? Are you drawing from your shoulder, and applying the ghosting method? These are all important things you need to ask yourself.
Next Steps:
I strongly believe that you should go back to the exercises from lessons 1 and 2 - not necessarily redoing the whole lessons but getting comfortable with them and making sure others agree that you understand the exercises' goals and focuses. Then you can come back to lesson 3 and redo the work. I believe that getting a firmer grasp of the ghosting method and how to apply it to every mark you put down will help you considerably.