Lesson 2: Contour Lines, Texture and Construction

10:58 AM, Thursday February 15th 2024

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With Dissections exercise I kinda gave up on the light gradient and focused on understanding the textures

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3:39 PM, Sunday February 18th 2024
edited at 3:40 PM, Feb 18th 2024

Hi there Absolute! Great job on finishing this lesson. Here's some feedback:

Arrows:

Generally your lines are very confident and clean - great job! When it comes to adding lineweight and hatching, I would advise to treat each line with just as much care, and make sure to ghost. Sometimes I see that your lineweight strays a bit from the original line. With hatching too, make sure to not just move your hand back and forth and do all the lines in one go, but focus on each invidivual line when hatching!

Organic Forms:

Confident again, nice! The axis are mostly aligned and I also see that your ellipses get thinner in the middle as the perspective changes. So that's all great. On one of your organic forms where you drew the full elipses, you did correct the lines and went over them again - try to not do that. And I see that with the forms where you drew only the hooks, they hook nicely except for just a few at the end with missing hooks. Also keep this in mind: Demo

Texture analysis:

You made very clear decisions about where to put your marks and there's a clear transition from the middle to the light area. So that's awesome. I'd say that the transition from dark to middle needs just a little more work, though. Right now it looks like one black bar on the right which makes the transition a bit sudden. Use the texture to smooth this out, and don't be afraid to use more black on that side!

Dissection:

Nice variety of textures and you also break the silhouette which is great! Sometimes I feel like you try to draw every single detail, which isn't always necessary. Like with the fish scales on the first page, or the feathers on the second - you drew out every individual scale and feather. It's better to just suggest thse shapes, and going from dark to light can really help with this. That way, you only really draw the texture on the transition area.

Intersections:

You really filled up the page and have a nice variety of shapes. great job! I do think that you could push the overlap a bit more. The shapes don't touch that much, which makes their intersections less big. There's also the fact that often when you deal with circles, you intersections have too many straight edges. Especially when a cilinder intersects with a ball, you tend to follow the shape of the cilinder, but you should have a more curved edge as it follows the surface of the ball. When it gets to intersecting to curved shapes, use this guide: another demo

Organic Intersections:

These are very nice! They really look like they have weight to them and rest on each other. I saw only one time where you shaded the wrong form, and great job in not correcting it but leaving it as is! The result still looks very clean and nice. I don't have anything to improve about this one.

Conclusion:

Great stuff! The only real pointers are pushing your black transitions more and perhaps going further with the overlap of shapes. You might want to try the Dissections exercise again, but it's not a requirement. You can move on to lesson 3, great work!

Next Steps:

Next up: Lesson 3!

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edited at 3:40 PM, Feb 18th 2024
6:00 PM, Tuesday February 20th 2024

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