6:02 PM, Thursday November 9th 2023
I'm also a beginner working on the first lesson, so this is coming from a classmate rather than a teacher or a tutor.
To me, this looks good. Your lines don't wobble, and they seem to be in the right places.
I have one criticism:
On the longer lines that take up the whole page, I noticed that there was a lot more fraying at the beginning of the lines. I would try to practice eliminating the fraying at the beginning of the lines.
Like in the video, at the end of the line, fraying is normal and to be expected because we're drawing quickly.
But maybe try to be more careful when you initially place the pen on the paper so that the fraying doesn't occur at the beginning.
Good luck to you!
I will be posting mine for critiques this weekend, so wish me luck too.