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4:00 AM, Saturday July 11th 2020

So for your arrows, only a few had foreshortening gaps between their edges. I noticed also that some of your arrows had decreasing gaps as they were coming towards you. Make sure that the gaps are getting smaller the further they are away from you. Try not to think of your paper you're drawing on as a flat 2D piece, but rather a "window" to a 3D world. Try to spend more time planning and ghosting.

For your organic forms, I see a little more variation with your ellipse degrees, although you could push them more if you wanted to. Imagine what would happen if you were to bend your organic forms a bit further. Try to keep your ellipses aligned to the minor axis also.

Your organic intersections seem like they have improved in terms of them not floating in space. Be mindful of your contour lines - they should reinforce the fact that these forms are rounded, not flat. You've made some of them look nearly straight. Also be mindful of the hook at the ends of the contour lines. You should include them always. Additionally, add line weight only to the parts where the forms overlap one another.

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7:12 AM, Saturday July 11th 2020

Hi CONSCIOUSLEMON9,

Thanks again for taking the time to offer me this feedback. It's been extremely useful and highly appreciated.

I've attached a link to the revision requested:

https://imgur.com/a/skS7CYn

Looking forward to your response.

Thank you and have a great weekend.

Regards,

Silviu

12:58 PM, Saturday July 11th 2020

It looks better. Just a note that it would probably look better if you were to apply a gradient to your hatching from dense to sparse. Also, add some line weight to the overlapping edges so that you can better clarify what's in front of what.

Other than that, good job for completing lesson 2.

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Move on to Lesson 3.

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11:16 AM, Sunday July 12th 2020

Yes, I have to admit that I rushed the last page and focused only on the foreshortening. That's why the hatching and the lineweight are a bit messy. I should have taken my time.

Thank you again for all the feedback. It's been an immense help.

Have a great day!

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