2:53 AM, Tuesday March 1st 2022
Hi, great job on finishing Lesson 1! I'll be critiquing your work.
Lines
On Superimposed lines, there seems to be fraying on most of your lines which is something we want to avoid. You should be taking the time to plot your pen on the dot instead of rushing. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/9/fraying
On Ghosted Lines and Ghosted Planes, some of your lines are wobbly which may indicate that you aren't drawing the line confidently. You should be drawing each line utilizing the ghosting method and using your shoulder to ensure that your lines are smooth. You also shouldn't redoing your lines either, even if you made a mistake you should treat it as if it were right and move on to the next one. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/10/wobbling
Ellipses
On Ellipses in Planes, the majority of your ellipses are not touching all sides of the plane and are instead floating in the middle. Some are wobbly as well and remember to be using the ghosting method as well when drawing ellipses to make sure lines come out more smoothly and confidently. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/13/floating https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/13/deformed
On Tables of Ellipses, your ellipses are slightly wobbly and some are going out of bounds.
On Funnels, it looks like you aren't using a ruler to draw the long lines, making your ellipses look off centered.
Boxes
On Plotted Perspective, I can see in your first panel that you weren't drawing back to the vanishing point but resolved that in 2nd one below which is nice. On your 2nd panel, I can see lines that weren't used or attempts to redo lines, it's alright to make a mistake and you should move on as if it were right.
On Rough Perspective, you should be drawing from your shoulder and not from your wrist to prevent the small wobbles that are visible on your lines. You also seem to not be trying to draw your boxes back to the vanishing point but instead to the horizon line. You should be making guesses and try to plot your boxes back to the vanishing point. Same from your other works, don't try to redo your lines.
On Rotated Boxes, I feel as if you didn't quite exactly grasp the understanding of this lesson. You should be trying to guess the space and arrangement of the boxes from the boxes next to them.
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Some boxes aren't rotating. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/17/notrotating
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Some boxes aren't aligned with other boxes and are instead sticking out. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/17/guessing
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The majority of your boxes are also not drawn through. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/17/notdrawingthrough
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Some of your lines are wobbly and the application of your line weight as well. Line weight should be applied on top of the 1st line using the ghosting method or a superimposed line on top of the other.
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Your hatching is very rushed, and on the top left it looks like you quickly scribbled circles. You should take your time with hatching and use the ghosting method on each one just like the ones you did on plotted perspective. Don't scribble your lines or rush them.
On Organic Perspective, your lines are wobbly, not properly applying line weight, and are attempting to redo some lines.
Overall, I feel you didn't properly try to understand the purpose of some of these lessons and rushed instead. It's good to take your time and be able to process and understand the information before you begin working on the homework assignments to avoid the mistakes you did.
Please reply with the following revisions
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1 filled page of the Ghosted Lines Exercise - Try to draw more lines to get more practice and remember to use the ghosting method and draw from the shoulder
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1 filled page of Ellipses in Planes - Remember that your ellipses are touching all sides of the plane and aren't floating.
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2 filled pages of Rough Perspective - Remember to draw and plot your lines back to the vanishing point.
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1 filled page of Rotated Boxes - Make sure you the boxes are aligned with one another, draw through the boxes, and rotate as well.
Next Steps:
Please reply with the following revisions
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1 filled page of the Ghosted Lines Excercise
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1 filled page of Ellipses in Planes
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2 filled pages of Rough Perspective
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1 filled page of Rotated Boxes