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12:04 AM, Friday June 24th 2022

So you definitely have demonstrated the ability work with lots of foreshortening, especially towards the end there - but you still do have quite a few cylinders here where your side edges are basically running totally parallel to one another. That's something I specifically explained as being incorrect in my previous critique, so I'm not really sure why you continued doing that here, in cases like 1, 11, 24, 45, and so on.

I highly recommend that you go back over my previous feedback and come to an answer for yourself. I will be marking this challenge as complete, but if my previous explanation as to why this is incorrect was unclear, you should ask questions to receive clarification. If however you were just careless, then you need to reflect on how you're approaching the way in which you apply feedback.

Regardless, I am going to mark this challenge as complete. Just be sure to also continue practicing the use of the ghosting method to achieve a confident execution of your ellipses - the wobbling/hesitation is invariably a sign of not executing as confidently as you should, and prioritizing accuracy over that confidence, in the manner Lesson 1 stated would be incorrect. So, the second your pen touches the page, commit to your stroke regardless of your fears that you're going to make a mistake.

Next Steps:

Move onto lesson 6.

This critique marks this lesson as complete.
12:51 AM, Friday June 24th 2022

Well the good news is that drawing cylinders is part of my regular practice, so I will keep at it. There seems to be a particular speed that seems to be the best combination of confident and accurate for me. Unfortunately I don't always hit it. Too slow and it gets wobbly and too fast and it's all over the place. I did make an effort to ghost and improve the side line quality.

Not to be contentious, but you did say to vary the foreshortening. I freely admit that I didn't have enough variation in my first batch, so I made an effort to increase the range on the second one. The word vary suggested to me a wider range, which would include the parallel sided ones too. When I look across the room at my paper towel roll, it looks a lot like the strait sided ones. I can see plenty of uses for greater foreshortening too, but I thought I should practice the full range. I wasn't trying to ignore instructions. Sorry if it came across that way.

12:59 AM, Friday June 24th 2022

In my initial critique, I explained that them being actually parallel would not make sense for this challenge, because it only happens in such a specific orientation of the cylinder that, given as limited a sample size as we have here, it's best to always incorporate a concrete vanishing point - that is to say, with your lines converging towards an actual point, even if it's only very far off. There should be at least a little convergence, otherwise you run into that mistake.

Anyway, hopefully that's clearer now.

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