1:14 AM, Thursday January 12th 2023
Hello Kittensmittens, I am going to be critiquing your submission.
Organic Forms With Contour Curves: These look pretty good and smooth. The problem is that you did not keep both ends of the sausage the same size. Imagen the sausage as if it were two identical balls connected by a tube. Sometimes, they swell up or become thinner in the tube part as well, which we don’t want. This picture might help: https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/7f789bfa.jpg
Insect drawings:
These are pretty clean and well made!
The problems come on on the legs, where the lines tend to be a bit unconfident and wobbly and sometimes they have the same problems that your sausages did where they swell or contract. It also looks like in some spots you drew a line you weren't happy with, and then went over it again. Avoid doing this no matter how bad the initial line turns out. If what you were trying to do was add line weight to the legs, then remember that you only add line weight when the forms are overlapping and not on the outline. This goes for the entire bug, not just the legs.
They're are some times when you undermine the construction of your drawings. Take the head of the fire ant, for example. You cut through the initial form (the circle you drew) in order to make the pointed head of the ant. It is very difficult to cut through a 3d form and to have it still look 3d, as explained in this image.
https://i.imgur.com/VdwbRuU.png
You also have this issue in Hammonds lined june beetle, where you cut into the spheres that made up the thorax and abdomen of the beetle. With this drawing specifically, you also have a bit of trouble keeping all of you lines confident and not wobbly so look out for that too.
Always mass onto a form instead of cutting into it for the animals and insects you will draw. A very good example of how to construct an ants head this constructively way would be like this:
https://i.imgur.com/X4tx6KB.png
Your overall construction is pretty sparse, too. There are times you could have added more mass to objects to make it closer to the reference images, kind of like this:
These are things you can definitely still practice in lesson 5 though, so go ahead and move on!
Next Steps:
Move on to lesson 5!