10:36 PM, Wednesday November 2nd 2022
Hello. My name is Seany and I'm here to critique your work today.
1. Superimposed Lines -Make sure that you're putting the tip of the pen only the starting line. You need to aim for the starting line having no fraying ends. 2. Ghosted Lines - Your lines seems to be overarching. Remember to use your shoulder and try underarching your lines. 3. Ghosted Planes/Ellipses in Planes -For your ellipses, make sure to tighten up your ellipses. But don't worry, it will take a bit of practice until you can make better ellipses.
1. Tables of Ellipses - The ellipses are, I assume that the second page was your first page, should be next to each other. 2. Funnels -Some of your funnels aren't symmetrical. They should have the same amount of ellipses on both sides. Also make sure that your ellipses are alligned. They shouldn't be slanted.
1. Plotted Perspective -A box on the third plotted perspective section is looking distorted. Make sure to put all your boxes between your vanishing points. 2. Rough Perspective -Make sure your width lines are parallel to the horizon and the height lines perpendicular to the horizon. Also, you should be doing your extensions, especially the one box with the question mark. 3. Rotated Boxes - Make sure you're drawing through your boxes because I can see some that are not. Hopefully, I've done well with critiquing your work.
-I want you to work on 1 page on Table of Ellipses, and 1 page of funnels. Good luck.
9:27 PM, Sunday January 22nd 2023
Hi thanks for the critique totally didn't realise I had to send the revision I've since moved on to lesson 2 after finished the 250 box challenge