Hi,
Despite the long absence I did finish this homework, real life got in the way again, but I should be able to pick up the pace over the winter. The texture section and the organic forms wasn't as crip as I would like, my lines get wonky when I get to close to the edge of the paper. If you can't read my chicken scratch I can fill in the details of the textures if needed.
Cheers,
DrReverendJ
Hey there I'll be handling your lesson 2 critique.
So before getting into this critique I'd like to make something clear. This submission is quite rough and I'll be listing a lot of things matter of factly in order for us to get through it quickly so you can work on improvements as soon as you can. Just know that anything that comes off as blunt here isn't me trying to push your work to the side or insult your character as a person and is just with the intent of getting you back to work and learning.
Your arrows are wobbly and bulge/pinch in a way that prevents them from flowing smoothly. You're not always drawing your lines in one pass through and instead connect broken lines, and your hatching is quite messy and hastily done. You're also not experimenting with foreshortening much, there are attempts in your arrow but not much in the spaces between the curves as discussed here.
Your organic forms with contours are much too complex and don't follow the rules of a simple sausage as discussed here. Your contours are quite stiff and wobbly and their degrees don't shift along the form as shown here.
In the textures exercises you're focusing on outlines and negative space rather than cast shadows. I also get the strong impression that you're not paying attention to your reference enough and working from memory quite a bit as a lot of your textures look like you're symbol drawing. The importance of cast shadows was discussed here.
In form intersections your lines are wobbling and arcing showing you're still not drawing confidently (which is a common theme through all your exercises) and not using your shoulder. Your boxes also aren't converging consistently, while we don't expect you to be perfect at drawing boxes you definitely had better looking ones in your box challenge submission. You're not drawing through your ellipses at all, you're not avoiding stretched forms as directed in the instructions here
Lastly in the organic intersections your forms don't stack upon each other in a way that makes much sense and your shadows edges are quite rough.
Overall I do get the impression you were rushing a bit through this, and seeing as it's been a bit since your last submission you most likely have a bit of rust and unfamiliarity with some of the previous concepts. (Line quality is a big one)
Again I can't stress that this isn't against you personally but there are major issues in each exercise as well as mistakes from previous lessons we wouldn't expect you to be making still. I'll be asking you to re-read and redo this lesson as well as resubmit it. Normally when asking for revisions it doesn't require another credit, but seeing as you'll be redoing every exercise in this lesson as well as needing them all critiqued again it will need to be a separate submission requiring a new credit.
I know you can do this, you just need to spend a bit of time revisiting previous exercises to remind yourself of what they taught and then tackle these exercises with more patience and your best effort.
I look forward to seeing your future work.
Next Steps:
Re-read and redo all of lesson 2.
Hi,
Thanks for the feed back, quick question, you refer to "Symbol Drawing" and my googling is not really telling me much. What do you mean by that and what is a good way to prevent it? I'll just add I've never taken a drawing class in my life, so a bunch of these terms are pretty foreign to me.
Cheers,
DrReverendJ
No problem.
Symbol drawing is basically working from memory instead of observing what you're trying to draw. The most common example is probably when people try to draw eyes they'll draw circles instead of looking at all the detail in the form of the eye and how there's actually quite a bit of construction involved like the tear ducts, eye lids etc.
For more info on symbol drawing there's some info here.
These are what I use when doing these exercises. They usually run somewhere in the middle of the price/quality range, and are often sold in sets of different line weights - remember that for the Drawabox lessons, we only really use the 0.5s, so try and find sets that sell only one size.
Alternatively, if at all possible, going to an art supply store and buying the pens in person is often better because they'll generally sell them individually and allow you to test them out before you buy (to weed out any duds).
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