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##### 8:26 PM, Thursday December 15th 2022

Hello I’ll be handling the critique for your lesson 3 homework.

Organic Arrows :

-Starting with the organic arrows you are doing some good attempts at the perspective of the ribbon and you’ve also drawn your marks with confidence. It doesnt seems that you are both aware of how the arrow gets wider as it moves closer to the viewer enough, and the fact that the negative space between the zigzagging sections of the ribbon decreases as it moves further away.but keep aware of the negative space how it compresses and see the instructions of arrows let’s move on to the next section.

by the way u did nice job better than me

Branches :

good forking by the way and u did well done job

First of all remember that you should extend each segment fully halfway to the next ellipse. RIght now its good . This causes you to have some gaps where the edges are not touching the ellipses. try to use ghosting method with that and when feel confidance draw that stroke when its halfway to next ellipse

Once you’ve drawn those edges you can use them as a sort of a “runway” to guide your next stroke, by overlapping them a good bit, this will ehlp ou to achieve a smoother transition. Here is a diagram that illustrates these past two points https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/18463269.png as i saw few tails

Leaves :

-Moving on to the leaves you are doing a good job with the first two steps, that is drawing the flow line and the edges for the silhouette. and one important step and that is drawing the edge details

the iris should follow a focal point from sparse to dense as u consider other textures

i dont have much to say ur work is great but i would be glad if u could use ref of demos anyway u did great job

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##### 2:45 PM, Saturday December 17th 2022

Hello,

Thank you for your feedback. Here is another page of arrows. I concentrated on accentuating the change in ribbon width from the background to the foreground as you indicated.

##### 9:40 PM, Saturday December 17th 2022

hi nice job anyway its my missing i didnt attacth this to u

your making some good attempts at the perspective of the ribbon. The main issue here though is that you are not aware that the negative space between the zigzagging sections of the ribbon should decrease as it moves further away, as shown here ( https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/011d064f.jpg ), this is the only thing missing for your arrows to look tridimensional. and push the perspective more not to look like same and the lines from start need more confidance like the flow lines of the arrow nice job with that try as superimposed by focusing and choose the right speed

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