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4:00 PM, Sunday June 28th 2020

Hello mhsh1122115!

Before I delve into the critique, a couple of friendly notes for future consideration:

  • You have more than the necessary number of pages for some of the exercises. While it’s ok to do parts of the exercise in your warm ups (about 10-15 minutes), be careful not to grind by doing full exercises more than what is required. I did notice, however, that some of the pages in your submission also appear to be duplicates, so please take a moment to double check that you have just the necessary assignments uploaded. This will certainly help those of us reviewing your work :) I take it that the ones that have your username attached are the ones meant for the submission, so I’ll be focusing on those.

  • When scanning, please refrain from increasing the contrast or using the Black/White setting. The high contrast unfortunately loses some of the detail, and the subtle detail helps with the critiques.

Now then, onto your submission!

Lines

Overall, you are starting off with smooth strokes in your superimposed and ghosted lines. They tend to waver a bit and arc as you draw your line towards the targeted point. When it comes to your ghosted planes, there is a mix between confident lines and broken, wavering lines that are corrected.

To note, confidence should take precedence and be prioritized before accuracy. It’s ok that the lines aren’t fully accurate, as it is imperative to first develop the shoulder muscle memory to draw out smooth, confident strokes. So continue to ghost and execute every line with your shoulder. Essentially, a confident stroke that is slightly inaccurate is better than an accurate but wobbly line.

Regarding the aforementioned broken and corrected lines -- no matter how tempting it is to correct an errant line, do not correct or repeat over it to correct it. To help prevent this, take your time with planning with dots (which I see you use a couple, but others may have been lost in the contrast). The great thing about dots is you don’t have to commit to the very first dot(s) you place. They can be moved around as you see fit before you commit to a line. But once you draw the line, stick with what you have even if it’s wrong.

Ellipses

Your ellipses are starting off fairly decently. While there are generally smooth strokes and there are some nice confident ellipses, there is a fair share of loose ellipses. This may mean you are drawing the ellipses quite fast, so try to experiment slowing down a bit to gain better control (but not to the point where there are wobbling strokes).

Also, some ellipses turn sharply as you fit your ellipses in their allotted spaces. This causes the ellipses to be misshaped. Just as with lines, it’s ok if the accuracy is a bit off. As you continue to draw with confident strokes, focus on maintaining the ellipses' roundedness, then accuracy last.

There are a few instances where you end the ellipse with a straight tail or hook away from the original form. As you’re coming to the end of drawing the ellipse, lift your pen while you continue to motion the ellipse instead of away from the ellipse.

Ellipses in funnels are mostly aligned to the minor axis. Some do shift off the minor axis and loses symmetry on either side of the axis.

Lastly, you are mostly drawing through the forms appropriately (2-3 times), which is great. However, be careful to not draw through them any more than 3 times or any less 2 times.

Again, you've demonstrated some nice confident ellipses in here, so you can do this!

Boxes

I’m noticing a few things with your line quality -- they admittedly are very sketchy throughout the box exercises and decline quite a bit in your organic perspective. Don’t rush through any of the lines, as it will sacrifice the quality of your work. To reiterate, don’t correct any lines; use dots to plan your trajectory, ghost with your shoulder, then draw each line once and confidently. This also applies to hatching lines (except perhaps the use of dots). Hatching lines should be tight, parallel, and consistent. Moreover, they should start at one edge of a plane and end at another edge of a plane.

Plotted perspective

This exercise should have been done with a straightedge/ruler without freehand. Hence, some of the boxes gets skewed.

Rough perspective

A couple of things to keep in mind for this exercise:

  • Horizontal lines should be parallel to the horizon line

  • Vertical lines should be perpendicular to the horizon line

While there are plenty of evidence you are doing this (which is certainly a challenge in itself!), there are some lines that stray off diagonally.

Rotating boxes

You mostly got through the exercise! Don’t be afraid to tackle the boxes on the corners and edges. With that said, the boxes are actually not rotating, particular along the horizontal and vertical axes -- meaning the boxes are sharing a similar or the same vanishing point as the box adjacent to it. Otherwise, the boxes are well neighbored to each other, and you are drawing through your boxes, which is great.

Organic perspective

As the boxes get slightly smaller on the path, they appear to move slightly away from the viewer, so nice job with that. In terms of perspective, there are some sets of parallel lines that diverge away, making planes that are further away appear to get larger instead of slightly smaller. But no worries, you’ll have plenty of practice in the 250 Box Challenge!

Before I mark this complete, I would like to see one more page of ghosted lines.

Next Steps:

Please do 1 page of ghosted lines. There is no deadline, so take the time you need!

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
10:54 PM, Tuesday October 11th 2022

Thank you for reviewing my homework I stopped and I returned I will send all the homework agin

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