8:38 PM, Wednesday January 19th 2022
As a whole your work here is coming along quite well, though I do have a few things to point out:
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In your lobster/shrimp demo drawings, there are quite a few ways that you didn't follow the demo directly. I can only imagine that for whatever reason you didn't actually do a direct draw-along (which means you weren't following the instructions). If you did intend to do a direct draw-along as instructed, then you didn't follow the demos closely enough, and need to observe each step much more carefully.
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One of these is that, when building up masses on the arms/claws, and as a result, instead of having your additional masses press up against one another, you've left this arbitrary gap between them. Ensure that your masses press against one another. As explained here it's only as a response to direct contact with these other structures that our additional masses' silhouettes can have inward curves.
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I also noticed that you pretty consistently neglected to draw the contour line that defines the joint between your sausage structures. You also didn't build upon them at all for your lobster, and for the shrimp, you did so entirely differently from what the demo showed.
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Here's another approach you could use for that dragonfly's abdomen (this is from a critique I did a ways back for another student). The important difference here is that we start out with a simpler sausage structure, and then build variation on top of it, rather than jumping right into those protruding sections right off the bat.
I am concerned about how much you deviated from the demonstrations for the shimp/lobster, but ultimately that's a matter of conscious choices you made, rather than an issue of skill or understanding. Thus, assigning more revisions will not help with that. I'm simply going to remind you that following the instructions as closely as you can is going to make the difference between getting a little out of this course, and getting a lot.
So, I'll go ahead and mark this lesson as complete. Before you move onto the next one, do take some time to review the feedback I've given to you thus far for Lesson 4 and make sure you continue to apply it as strictly and directly as you can.
Next Steps:
Move onto lesson 5.