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11:35 PM, Tuesday March 10th 2020
Hey there!
Going right into the critique -- first off, your superimposed lines look good, but a few of them fray at both ends. Try to be mindful of placing your pen back to the starting point correctly before drawing out your line - you can read on that here. From then on, all your lines suffer from quite a bit of wobbling. Read up on that here and here. Always make sure to ghost your lines before executing your line as straight and confidently as possible. Part of your wobbling issue, correct me if I'm wrong, may also be that you are drawing in a sketchboox -- it could be that the papers aren't on a perfectly flat surface, or they aren't flat enough themselves, buckling as you draw, forcing the wobbles.
Moving on, your ellipses are also quite wobbly, and many aren't drawn through enough. I'd like to direct your attention to these: here and here. The same advice applies for ellipses - ghost through them a couple times, then confidently draw out your ellipse and draw through it 2-3 times. Don't hesitate! Even if it doesn't touch the borders perfectly, a smooth elipse is much better than one that touches the edges but is bumpy.
The same goes for your ellipses in funnels, though I can definitely see improvement in these, they look smoother and more confident than the table of ellipses. One issue with your funnels though is misaligned minor axis of your ellipses -- read here.
Plotted perspective should be done with a ruler in it's entirety. The purpose of this exercise in particular is to familiarize you with the conceptperspective. Also, try to keep your hatching lines neat! It makes a big difference in how polished your final work looks.
Rough perspective looks good, it's only suffering from the wobbling problem that I have already mentioned. For this one, draw out your frame and horizon line with a ruler, the rest is freehand.
Same wobbling problem goes for Rotated boxes. Your corner boxes don't rotate quite as much as they should, but that is normal as this exercise is very difficult.
Organic perspective looks good, and line quality seems like it improved for this one. Sense of scale is conveyed very well. Good job!
The last thing I will note is that while some of the exercises require 1-2 pages, there are 2-3 frames on each page, meaning each exercise would have to be completed 3 times per page, as written here:
Since we'll do this exercise several times on a page, make sure you arrange it so you can fit two or three of these on the page, and make sure they're rectangular, wider than they are tall.
With all this said, this was a solid submission and you demonstrated valuable understanding of many of the concepts in the lessons, however I believe you'd benefit from practicing confident line execution some more. Well done! :)
Next Steps:
I truly think you'd benefit most from cleaning up your line work before moving on to 250 boxes, so I suggest you revisit the following exercises:
-Ghosted Lines
-Ghosted Planes
-1 page of Table of Ellipses
1:29 AM, Thursday April 2nd 2020
https://imgur.com/gallery/hTcwypJ
thanks a lot for the feedback, i tried to commit more to my lines this time, thats why i screwed up some of them, also i did 2 pages of tables of ellipses because im redoing lesson one seeing how i havent done anything drawabox related in quite a while.
10:01 PM, Friday April 3rd 2020
These are looking much much better! Great job!
I don't think repeating the entire lesson is necessary, so long as you understand the concepts and come back to the exercises for your warmups. Good luck going forward! :)
Next Steps:
Warm ups, 250 boxes challenge.
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