7:00 PM, Friday February 11th 2022
Your work here is kind of mixed.
When it comes to head construction, I can see that in this rhino you made a pretty good effort to apply the specific points shown in the informal head construction demo (I'd make some small adjustments but generally it clearly showed that you were following the demonstration). On the other two however, it's pretty clear that you weren't paying that much attention to the demo provided - on the wolf you have the eye socket shape wit the same number of corners, but you've got the point facing upwards rather than downwards, and so you don't end up with the wedge shape for the muzzle to fit into, nor the flat edge across the top for the forehead to rest upon. For the bear, you went with a 4 cornered diamond, which does not match the demo at all.
For leg construction, you seem to be stopping pretty early. In the bear you neglected to define any of the joints between the leg segments with contour lines (as stressed in the middle of the sausage method diagram. You're doing it more consistently in the rhino (except for one of the back legs), and same goes for the wolf. But the sausages are just the first step to leg construction - as I've called out to you in the past, we can then build upon those structures as shown here. You just stop at the basic sausages and call it a day.
In general, this also goes hand in hand with the fact that I think you are struggling to spend as much time as you should observing your reference. There's a lot of oversimplifying going on, and that simply occurs when we keep our faces glued to the page we're drawing on, and don't look at our reference frequently enough. Every single mark and form we put down should be informed by having looked at our reference and identified a specific element we wish to transfer over to our construction.
In addition to this, I know I shared this example of how to approach building up feet with boxier forms, using the corners of their silhouettes to distinguish the front/side/top planes, and then how we can further build upon them with yet more boxy forms for the toes. I had shared it with you on discord - I know this because I frequently went back into our convos to find it in order to share it with other students.
Lastly, it looks like the additional masses you drew on the bear's back don't reflect the points I raised in my last critique about how those silhouettes ought to be designed. I mentioned there that inward curves need to be used strategically, only in order to define a contact being made with another structure - basically where our mass gets pressed up against something else. Where such contact is not made, we thus must only use outward curves. If we look here on the bear we can see that inward curves were placed arbtirarily along the outer edge, where nothing is pressing against it.
Here's how those masses can be drawn to better establish a relationship with the existing structure in 3D space.
As a whole, I really don't think you're putting your all into what you've submitted here. I know in the past you've been prone to creating a lot of drawings, then only submitting a couple. I don't know if that's what you're doing here, but think about it this way - if you did 20 drawings when only 3 were requested, and they all took roughly the same amount of time, you could have spent 6 times more energy, effort, and time on the three that were requested. Quantity does not replace the quality of the effort and time you invest into each individual mark, and into following the instructions for every technique.
Lastly, your organic intersections are coming along decently, although note that when the cast shadow is farther away from the form, that tells us that there's more physical space between the form and the surface it's casting a shadow onto. This can be very useful when you've got, say, a form that has a section that's suspended in the air, but here it does give the impression that the sausage is lifting off a little bit.
Anyway, you'll find your revisions assigned below.
Next Steps:
Please submit 3 additional animal constructions. Submit every animal construction you produce, but as you're being told only to produce 3, that's what should be submitted.
Additionally:
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On the drawing, note the times you started/stopped for each session, along with the date. I want you to keep track of just how much time you're spending on each drawing, how it's spread out, etc.
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Be sure to review the lesson material and my past feedback prior to working on each construction - you're prone to forgetting things that have been called out. That's not your fault, but it is your responsibility to compensate for it, rather than to have me call out similar problems each time.
