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7:39 PM, Saturday July 4th 2020
Firstly, be careful with the pen that you're using and please only use black pens. There is an article on the site about the issue if you want to check out.
Your organic arrow work looks good. It ticks all the boxes for that homeworks requirements.
Organic forms with contour ellipses looks good as well. Only thing is that I think you could allign your ellipses a bit better. On organic forms with contour lines, you seem to hook only one point of the lines around forms. It would look better and be more helpful for you to understand if you hooked both points.
Texture analysis looks pretty good. But in crumpled paper density box, texture transition looks very abrupt the beginning, where black becomes texture. You didn't do the same thing for the other textures, whiich shows me that you're aware of the point, which is what's really important.
On dissections, textures are not really wrapped around, and they don't show any transition. They just look like to blocks of texture with a blank space in between them. You should put the texture along the imaginary contour lines of the forms - texture would go around the form, not in a straight line from one edge to the other - and instead of putting a white block in the middle, you should make the edges denser. Objects won't look that washed out unless there is a very powerful light on it, which is less often than a medium lighting.
On form intersections, you didn't mark areas that forms would intersect. It's not clear if they're intersecting or on top of each other. Try emphasizing the planes that forms would intersect. They don't have to be perfect, just give some thought to it. And some of the forms are just floating around arbitrarily. They all should be intersecting with each other and forming a pile.
Organic intersections look pretty, only thing to look out is that shadows wrap around the object underneath, they don't just stick out with the forms. But it's not a big problem in my opinion.
I'm gonna request a revision because I think there are some important points that you're missing. My requests are organic forms with contour lines (hook both ends of the lines), texture dissections (please give some thought to how textures would wrap around a rounded object), and form intersections (try to imagine how orms would intersect). I hope I'm not asking too much.
See you soon!!
Next Steps:
I request one page of organic forms with contour lines, one page of texture dissections, and two pages of form intersections, one page only consisting of box intersections. Be mindul of my warnings, and feel free to re-read the instructions for these homeworks.
9:18 AM, Monday July 6th 2020
first thank you for taking your time to review this
I really appreciate it
Hope This looks better
11:47 AM, Monday July 6th 2020
Looks pretty good. Some things I'd like to point out moving forwards:
-Be mindful of the line quality of your contour lines. If they're some wobbly lines, they'll look like a bunch of wobbly lines. Be confident with your lines before anything, and accuracy will come overtime. Also remember that if your contour lines are more circular in the middle of the part, it will imply that is more of a cylinder (like a metal tube). If it gets flatter in the middle, it implies a flatter surface (a part of a succulent or aloe vera for example). Be mindful of this and use whichever suits your object the best.
-Think a bit more about how intersections work - for example what would it look like if a corner of a cube was cutting into a sphere and how you could imply this in a drawing. I highly recommend reading the article on subject and the instructions for orm intersections homework.
I hope you enjoy lesson 3. Wish you all the best. Take care!
Next Steps:
Be mindful of your line quality and think about how you can make a bunch of lines like a 3d object. All the best.
4:56 PM, Monday July 6th 2020
thank you for taking your time!
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