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1:01 PM, Monday May 10th 2021

This is definitely moving in the right direction. There are just a couple things I wanted to point out:

  • When adding additional masses along your sausage structures for the legs, remember that you shouldn't be adding random corners arbitrarily. Corners - and all sorts of complexity - exist in response to the structure that the form is being attached to. Here's what I mean.

  • I'm also noticing that when it comes to the larger additional masses - those you add along the torso - you're still somewhat neglecting the design of the masses' silhouettes, and opting to then wrap the whole torso in additional contour lines to compensate. Here's an example of what I mean. Do not rely on those contour lines here. All the heavy lifting is done by the silhouette of the additional mass that is being added. Think about how it wraps around the existing structures, as though it's holding onto them rather than just sitting quietly.

So, as a whole the main area you're going to want to focus your practice is on the use of these additional masses. They all follow the same rules - whether they're being applied to smaller, narrower structures, or larger ones. this is however something I think you can continue to work on yourself, as overall you are doing much better than before.

As such, I'll go ahead and mark this lesson as complete.

Next Steps:

Move onto the 250 cylinder challenge, which is a prerequisite for lesson 6.

This critique marks this lesson as complete.
2:34 PM, Monday May 10th 2021

Thank you so much for taking examples from my drawings and showing how they can be improved. It helps immensely.

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