Lesson 1: Lines, Ellipses and Boxes
8:54 PM, Friday September 30th 2022
Pleased to meet you, I am Doctormein and I'll be critiquing your submission for today.
Side notes : It would go a long way if you could get images that aren't blurry since that'll make those who critique you have a much easier time analyzing your misstep.
- Lines sections
Your superimposed lines looks great. I can clearly see that you've executed those line confidently and hesitation free, on top of that, your lines only have fraying on ones end. Well done.
Your ghosted lines are also quite well done too. There's only slight wobbliness to be seen and nearly no arcing at all. Better yet, there's neither overshooting nor undershooting too. Nicely done.
Side notes : It might be wise to draw more ghosted lines in this exercise, since that will contribute more to your practice. If you're unsure how many ghosted lines, organic forms, or anything exercise throw at you, that you should draw, you could use example homeworks as precedent for how much you should draw on a page.
This is slightly more complex version of the previous exercise. One thing I want you to keep in mind is overshooting issue. I've seen this issue comes up a bit more often in this exercise, though it's really, really small that it wouldn't make much of a difference. I'll be providing you This (How to address overshooting issue.) just in case. Aside from that, your execution here is solid too. There's not much to say about it.
Side notes : Pardon me If I am mistaken, but in some of your planes I saw that you're not plotting your dots for ghosting. If this is a genuine mistake, always remember to plot those dots because they'll help you out with the ghosting process. If not, pay this no mind.
Table of ellipses
I hope this word isn't too redundant for this critique, but well done. You've drawn through those ellipses 2-3 times as requested. You're not being hesitant while you're executing your ellipses, and you had concrete goal in mind while drawing those ellipses. Sure, your accuracy could be better, but this'll come with time and practice. Overall, good job.
Ellipses in planes
The same critique that I've said for table of ellipses do applied to this one too. Accuracy comes with times and practice, so keep doing what you're doing, laddie.
You've actually done quite well for this exercise too. Those ellipses are tightly packed together, and there wasn't any sign of you being way too loose with those ellipses. There's, of course, some misaligned ellipses, but this mistake is very, very common, especially for those who're doing this exercise for the first time. Like any others, this too will go away with time and practice. Links regarding misalignment. Video
Your format of doing this exercise is a little bit different than the example, but I am pretty sure that the heart of the exercise remains the same so I'll critique it as it is. As long as you're following instructions, step by step, then there's nothing to critique. And it's clear that you've followed instruction steps by step.
Side note : Even if it's not required, you still might want to hatch your boxes here since that'll contribute to your practice.
You haven't made any common mistake in this exercise, so good job. However, there are 2 thing I would like to critique.
Firstly, your lines are a little too light. I am unsure if this was intentional or unintentional of you to draw lightly. If it was, always remember that lighter lines, though useful in sketching and so on, should not be use in the context of this course. since this'll discourage you from being aware of every stroke you made, hence, contradict the point of this course as a whole. (To be confident and conscious of every stroke or marks you've made.) If this wasn't your intention, you might want to consider buying a new pen. Lighter lines mean those who critique your work will have a harder time analyzing your mistake.
Secondly, always remember that the width line will always be parallel to the horizon while height line will always be perpendicular to it. Though in your attempt you actually did quite well doing that, I believe it's still worthy of mention.
This exercise is really a tough one so no worries if you didn't get it right. I'll be mentioning some steps you could take to improve this exercise a bit.
In this exercise you seem to be throwing every Drawabox rule out of the window. I am not sure if it was because you were nervous or anything, but always keep in mind those drawing are EXERCISES. They doesn't represent your worth, quality or value as a person. If you've tried your best and the result came out badly, that's what we're looking for.
I'll be mentioning those thing you could improve as point instead to make them easier to digest.
always remember to think before executing your lines. In this exercise there's so many lines that seem to be haphazardly drawn.
Some boxes have rather peculiar rotation them. This probably occured because of your haphazardly drawn lines. Make sure they're trying their best to resemble the example homework
What I've critiqued in rough perspective can be apply here too. Remember, width line will always be parallel to the horizon while height line will always be perpendicular to it. (In this case, It'll probably be parallel to the vertical line.)
Every critique I mentioned here will be something you'll have to practice in 250 boxes challenge anyways. So I believe it's best to leave this out.
I am more than certain you're ready to tackle the next challenge. Don't forget to put those exercise into your daily warm-up pool too!
Next challenge : 250 boxes challenge.
This review was well worth the wait, thank you for putting effort into it :)
For the planes, I think I placed all the dots, but for later exercises I caught myself skipping them. I'm glad you caught onto that, I'll put effort into properly planning out my lines.
I'm afraid your link to the video about funnels got lost :(
As for the thin lines, I have indeed bought new fineliners since!
Rotated boxes is where I started to have a really hard time keeping track of things. Your advice is very welcome, and I agree with your assessment.
I will make care to be more patient with the planning step of ghosting, and it was important that I heard that before starting with the 250 boxes.