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12:58 AM, Friday December 25th 2020

Honestly, I prefer it when students take photos of their work anyway. Scanners tend to result in increased contrast, since students will often pick "drawing" settings that try and achieve a pure white page rather than capturing the image accurately.

Starting with your arrows, you're doing a great job of capturing how these flow through space with confidence and fluidity. This carries over very nicely into your leaves, where you're capturing not only how they sit in 3D space, but also how they move through the space they occupy. It seems you only really pushed into experimenting with more complex edge detail in two instances - definitely would have been nice to see you explore that with each of the leaves, but for those where you did, you did a good job of building on top of the existing structure, maintaining a tight relationship with that scaffolding. Do remember though - when it comes to the areas of solid black you added, it appears that you've just tried to decorate your leaf in whatever way you could, opting to apply some kind of form shading, rather than actually using it to imply the textural elements of those underlying forms. You did imply some of the major veins of the leaf, which is good, but such extensive shadow shapes wouldn't be necessary for that. Don't go overboard - always focus on what you're trying to achieve, what you're trying to communicate to the viewer, and focus on that.

Moving onto your branches, your work here is largely looking really good. Just one thing - make sure you're extending your segments fully halfway to the next ellipse to allow for a healthy overlap between them, which will help you transition as smoothly and as seamlessly from one segment to the next. This is explained in these notes.

Moving onto your plant constructions, your work is honestly very well done. There is one key issue I'll call out, but as a whole you're demonstrating a strong grasp of how your objects sit in 3D space, how all these different forms fit together, and even an exceptional eye for detail in some of the more heavily textured drawings.

The key issue I mentioned is this - always remember that every single drawing you do within this course is an exercise in developing your spatial reasoning skills. What this essentially means is that the focus is not in the end result - and so when approaching these individual drawings, I don't want you to draw your initial constructional marks more faintly, creating a separation between an "underdrawing" and a final pass. For example, if you look at the drawings on the right side of this page - some of the marks there are so faint that they're barely present, but more importantly, you've then followed them up with a slower, more careful line reasserting the lines you wanted.

Line weight and a 'clean up pass' is different - line weight focuses on localized areas, where we draw back over areas with confidence, using the ghosting method, to help clarify how one form might overlap another. A clean-up pass tends to be more careful, a little slower, a little more hesitant. It involves tracing back over lines that had already been drawn in full. This is something I want you to avoid, because tracing in this manner focuses too much on how the lines themselves exist on the flat page, rather than how they represent an edge in 3D space.

Instead, draw your initial constructions with confidence, don't go out of your way to try and hide them. This can result in sloppier linework, because your brain might be occupied with more than just drawing the marks to the best of your ability.

Now, I went a bit hard on that one issue - it's not always present, you've got plenty of areas where you've drawn with much more confidence throughout the whole set, but it is an important point to raise all the same. I know making a clean drawing is more satisfying, and being able to get into those beautiful details is great - but don't purposely draw your construction lighter with the intent of redrawing on top of it, just so you can end up with a cleaner drawing. That would defeat the purpose of this course as a whole.

So, keep that in mind. I'll go ahead and mark this lesson as complete. You are indeed still doing a great job, so keep it up.

Next Steps:

Feel free to move onto lesson 4.

This critique marks this lesson as complete.
9:23 AM, Friday December 25th 2020

Thank you for the critique and pointing out the issues

Honestly looking back I didn't have a clear distinction between the clean-up pass and adding line weight will have to look into that.

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