So there is improvement here, but there are a number of things I pointed out which are present here as well. Generally when a student comes back with their revisions within 24 hours, it tends to throw up a big red flag that suggests that they may not have taken as much time as they should have to properly reflect upon and absorb the critique that was provided to them. That appears to be the case here.

In my critique, I brought up the following issues:

• The tendency to zigzag your edge detail back and forth with a single continuous line. While you generally do try to stay pretty close to your previous phase of construction's edge, you appear to basically redraw the entire silhouette of your leaves when you jump in to add further detail. Instead of building up separate bumps as explained here, you basically replace the linework for the whole leaf or petal. I also noticed this one where you zigzagged back and forth across that previous edge.

• I mentioned that you should be constructing all of your cylinders around a central minor axis line, to help align your ellipses. You don't appear to have done so. If you're not sure what I'm talking about with this, you'll find an explanation in the lesson 1 ellipses video as well as along the right side of this step from lesson 2's form intersections.

• You mention that you're only adding line weight to clarify a specific overlap, but that is not at all what I'm seeing in your work. Looking at the flower pot of this cactus, it's very clear that you went back over the entire silhouette of that form. There are no overlaps being clarified along the base ellipse. In case you misunderstood what I meant by "clarifying overlaps in localized areas", here's what I mean. I'm very specifically adding weight only where the edges themselves overlap to help establish which leaf is in front.

There are a couple other things to point out as well:

• In your leaves, where you attempted the maple leaf, you pretty much abandoned the constructional process altogether - specifically in how you dived straight into the very complex edge detail of the leaf without first constructing a scaffolding to support it. There is actually an example for the same kind of complex leaf structure available here in the informal demos page.

• When adding textural detail to your leaves, you should be employing the principles covered in Lesson 2 - specifically the use of implicit drawing techniques, using cast shadow shapes to imply the presence of those textural forms. One thing you can do to help you avoid giving into the temptation of just drawing individual lines is to purposely use this two step process for all your textural marks - basically outlining your shadow shapes first, then filling them in. You can also find examples of how I approach implying the presence of a leaf's veins in the leaf exercise instructions.

• This last point isn't something discussed in the lesson - it comes up more in the next one, so it's not really something I consider to be a mistake, just some additional information I want to give you. When we add more complexity to a leaf's edges, we can do so by simply modifying that leaf's silhouette. When we attempt to do this to a form with actual volume to it (basically something that isn't flat like a leaf/petal), this approach actually ends up flattening it out. So instead, to build up those complex structures, we have to wrap new, complete, enclosed, 3D forms around those existing structures, as shown here.

All in all, I think you rushed in too enthusiastically, and did not take the time to really understand what I explained in my initial critique. I'd like you to try these revisions again, but this time you will not be allowed to submit them until 5 days have passed.

You will be allowed to submit them on Tuesday, May 18th, or later.