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2:33 PM, Wednesday June 1st 2022
Hello! Yaksir, I am Doctormein and i'll be critiquing your homework for this challenge.
(I've taken a little peek at your profile and saw that you haven't got your lesson 1 critique yet, It will probably be a good idea to get it critique first before moving on to my critique, Just to make sure that you're not missing any important information)
- Extension lines , Line quality , Hatching and Similar Orientation with boxes.
Your line quality overall is nicely done, Most of the outer part of the boxes are being drawn confidently and hesitation-free, However
your boxes inner lines (sometimes outer lines too) felt a bit wobbly and hesitant at time. there's quite a few boxes where your line felt a bit wobbly (188,199,205) and a portions of the lines are also Undershooting. (205,178,233,238) and some misses their marks a bit too. (250,245,241)
You might wanna try to focus your warm-up practice a little bit more toward Ghosted planes since you seem to be having trouble with ghosting a bit. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/ghostedplanes
For your Extension lines you've done pretty good so far,You've extended the line correctly from the intial y outward, There's only 1 boxes (248) that is wrongly extended, But i think its just one out of the pile and you're doing pretty well in this area.
Your Hatching is very well done with hesitant free execution and not overshooting and undershooting your lines, Same goes with your Box orientation Which is quite varied in both shapes,proportion and sizes, With that said i'll be moving on toward
- Convergence related points (Diverging lines,Parallel and inner corner)
The biggest takeaway here that i wanted to mention is about the Boxes inner lines, quite a handful of them are having clear divergence and early convergence (203,209,207,210,208,220) https://i.imgur.com/8PqQLE0.png (This is a diagram showing relation between each line in a set, Make sure to check it out it really helped me a lot while doing this challenge.) , Don't forget to compare your lines angles with others lines especially your Inner lines with the one that is infront of it, Since this will help you out with estimating your line angle
There's also quite a few lines that are Converging in pair instead of going to one vanishing point (212,214,207), Although this is very common and normal for student, It would still be beneficial for you to took note of it.
Finally parallel lines It might also be a good idea to try your best to iron them out, Because some of the boxes show quite a clear parallel line (215 Red lines , 224 red lines , 226 red lines , 240 red lines) Since a box in 3 point perspective will never have parallel lines, The only exception is when perspective is not applied to them (Orthographic view.)
I'll be moving on to conclusion
Next Steps:
- Conclusion
I think you might benefit a little more from doing a few more boxes, So i would like 15 boxes. (Take your times)
Focusing on
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inner line quality (Undershooting , not straying away too much from your intended end point)
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Convergence (Not having clear divergence Minor divergence are fine)
Resources
https://i.imgur.com/8PqQLE0.png (Diagram showing relation between each sets of lines)
https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/365180330103013388/892934905800052826/image0.png (Different order of drawing boxes that might help out with your inner corner
- Although in the fourth image the picture said that "the two lines are parallel for practical reason" try your best to still guess the vanishing point with those lines too, Don't just blindly draw them as parallel all the time
I wish you the very best of luck
- Doctormein
2:11 PM, Friday June 3rd 2022
Here are my revisions-
I want to thank you for taking time and looking at my boxes. Also, I don't know if I missed something on my end, but I believe Beckerito had already critiqued my lesson one. Sorry if I am mistaken on this.
Thanks again for the help :)
1:51 AM, Saturday June 4th 2022
Ah..! My mistake! I am really sorry for not noticing that, Now lets move on toward reviewing your revision shalt we?
- Overall your boxes quality has Significantly improved, In term of convergence and inner line quality, I can clearly see your effort toward fixing the stuff that i previously mentioned, So well done!
Of course there will be some misstep here and there, I'll be pointing them out for you to the best of my abilities,
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Don't forget about the line weight! In your submission, You've drawn line weight with a great deal of confidence around the silhouettes, Don't be afraid to do the same with the revision too, Remember it does not need to be perfect, Simply try your best to be confident in your execution.
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Inner corner divergence There's still some boxes that are having a little clear divergence, (15,1,4,2) But i think this will go away with times while doing those boxes as warm-ups
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Early convergence (5,8,15) in those boxes the early convergence are a bit clear so try to also fix on this too
Next Steps:
Although there's some mistake here and there, As long as you're doing the lesson 1 and 250 boxes as warm-ups, I think those will goes away with time.
I'll be marking this lesson as completed, Feel free to continue with your Drawabox journey!
- Doctormein
12:25 PM, Saturday June 4th 2022
Thank you :)
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