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7:46 PM, Monday July 27th 2020
Hello Holysnacks,
here my first attempt to give feedback. Let's see if it helps you.
Lines
The straight lines I've seen were drawn with confidence, starting always from defined starting point and have a consistent trajectory. There are only a handful of curved lines where some wobble is visible, especially in the wave like forms. I would suggest, if you ever repeat this exercise e.g. as a warm up, increase ratio of wave lines to straight lines to challenge you a little bit more in this area.
Ellipses
Ellipses in Tables are drawn 2 to 3 times and in bounds. Most of them are drawn confident. I'm not sure, but I have the impression that some ellipses rows are better than others. As I haven't seen how you draw it's a hint into the blue, but for me it's helpful also for ellipses to rotate the sheet, because some angels are more convenient for me to draw than others. If you like and not yet done, you could try it out.
Ellipses in Planes and Funnels contain multiple wobbly ellipses. They are quite good in bound and and beautiful perpendicular. That mean you have some oportunity to sacrefire a little bit accuracy for more confidence. I recommend to draw ellipses a little bit faster and for not loosing control keep on ghosting and ghosting and ghosting.
Boxes
Plotted Perspective looks like expected. Nothing I can add here.
In Rough Perspective width lines are parallel to horizon and height lines perpendicular to horizon. As you used the correction method as expected and you can see on your own how close you are to the vanishing point. I have nothing special to add here.
The Rotated boxes edges and corners are tight and boxes are rotated, which results in this nice sphere like form. I would recommend to double check the "corner" boxes, because I can't see the back planes. I would expect 5x5 back planes and depending of the degree of rotation 5x4 visible front planes. But also if some plane is nearly not visible, I would expect 12 lines for every of the 25 boxes. Compare it to the reference and check if you see what I mean... https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/5f4fef59.jpg
On organic perspective I realized that the boxes look a little bit bumpy and I don't mean the perspective, which I'm not able to critique. I followed up that trace to find out what's diffrent from other boxes and I have now an idea, I think you don't use the Y-Method...
"Often this will result in a sort of "Y" shape with angles greater than 90° between each line (resulting in something we call the Y method of constructing a box),"
... non of your boxes contain a "Y" (https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/organicperspective). In the Y method I start the box from one starting point with three lines going away from this point. This means the first three edges are automatically perfect alligned in that point. You get a perfect corner for free. Fom this on you can decide where to go, but I recommend to go from there as a path, so you minimize the mismatches in the conrners and a box will not appear as a group of 12 independent lines. It will lead to a more consistent boxes, also with the same skill level.
I hope my feedback helps you on your journey,
Neuromancer
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10:18 PM, Monday July 27th 2020
Hi Neuromancer,
Thanks for providing such a detailed feedback - much appreciated !
You're right to point out the wobbly ellipses; I do think I struggle more with circular movements than straight lines. Funnily enough, I actually thought that ghosting didn't apply to ellipses until I reread that section ... whoops.
Ah, I do see what you mean about the Rotated Boxes exercise. I forgot to draw through those boxes in the corners, which is why they all see to be missing planes.
Yes, now that I think about it I definitely did not use the Y-method (instead relying on just picturing what boxes looked like). I've started using it in the 250 Box Exercise and it's helped a lot to construct boxes that are a bit more proportional.
Thanks again for taking your time to give some feedback and hopefully I'll see you around for the next lesson!
Cheers,
Holysnacks
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1:35 PM, Monday July 27th 2020
Super-Imposed/ Lines: There is some fraying but that is expected. There is some wobble but it's more obvious in longer lines the elbow could be becoming more involved that it should when the arm get further away.
Ghosted lines/planes: Always start on the first dot which is fantastic there's again some wobble in some of the lines but the lines don't overshoot the second poin by much or undershoot which is good. On the planes your lines look more confident.
Ellipses: Nice tight lines. theres some wobble but ellipses are hard! Ghost a few more times to get rid of some wobble.
I noticed the accuracy on your ellipses is good but confidence may be sacrificed for accuracy. Be aware of that a confident ellipse is better than a slightly more accurate one.
Rough Perspective: Good job with the horrizontal lines for all the boxes. some of the vertical lines are a little off but that comes in time too. Theres some wobble, not a lot here, but this exercise gets difficult when you try to be confident but accurate at the same time. The 250 Box challenge will help.
Rotated Boxes: The spacing is good. There is rotation possibly could have slightly more as the last boxes drawn should almost be at the side profile but it's a great attempt!
Organic Boxes: Good job with the larger to smaller. Some of the lines aren't parallel however the 250 box challenge again will give lots of practice.
Next Steps:
Congratulations getting through the first lesson! keep these are part of your warm up don't forget the 50% fun drawing and continue on to the 250 Box challenge. Also feel free to leave critiques for the other free lesson 1 students now that you have completed the lesson.
10:08 PM, Monday July 27th 2020
Thanks for your feedback! Very helpful, especially because I've started on the 250 Box Challenge and have found that I still struggle a bit with wobbly lines and priortizing confidence. Hopefully it'll improve with practice and time!
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