8:08 PM, Wednesday March 13th 2024
Hello Yume, I'll be the teaching assistant handling your lesson 4 critique.
Starting with your organic forms you're doing a pretty good job of sticking to the characteristics of simple sausages that are introduced here.
Something I did notice, is a bit of a tendency for there to be a bump where the beginning and end of the stroke join together, for example the midsection of the form in the upper left corner of this page. Although your lines generally appear quite smooth and confident, these bumps have the hallmarks of making a course correction once the pen is already on the page. This comic discusses how we can use the ghosting method to build temporary muscle memory, and then execute the mark confidently, trusting in that muscle memory rather than attempting to correct a line that is already in progress.
Keep in mind that the degree of your contour lines should be shifting wider as we slide along the sausage form, moving farther away from the viewer. This is also influenced by the way in which the sausages themselves turn in space, but farther = wider is a good rule of thumb to follow. If you're unsure as to why that is, review the Lesson 1 ellipses video. You can also see a good example of how to vary your contour curves in this diagram showing the different ways in which our contour lines can change the way in which the sausage is perceived.
Moving on to your insect constructions it looks like there are 2 pages missing from the homework assignment, which is as follows:
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4 pages of insect/arachnid drawings that are purely constructional with no texture or detail.
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6 pages of insect/arachnid drawings that can go into texture and detail if you wish.
This comes to a total of 10 pages of constructions, but there are only 8 in the Imgur album.
Please upload the 2 missing pages and reply with a link, and I will provide feedback as soon as I can.
Next Steps:
Please upload the 2 missing pages of insect constructions.