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7:25 PM, Wednesday January 24th 2024
hello! today i'll be critiquing your homework
superimposed lines- these look solid
ghosted lines- your lines are a bit wobbly and don't look very confident upon closer inspection. wobbly lines are generally incorrect- as long as the lines are straight and confident, you're doing it right.
ghosted planes- the lines are a lot more confident here. however i still think some of your lines are arching, and not in the way that's natural for your arm- they look nervous. for reference, look at the planes at the bottom of the first page of the ghosted planes you posted. they wobble and are bumpy. you might need to work on this
tables of ellipses- these look solid overall. some ellipses fall outside the table but that's fine.
ghosted ellipses- some of the ellipses don't touch any borders of the planes. however, this will get better with a little bit more ghosting and practice
funnels- some of the ellipses aren't symmetrical across the minor axis, but overall solid.
plotted perspective- looks solid
rough perspective-this looks solid as well. some of the lines on your boxes have the same problems as ghosted planes and lines. not all boxes reach the vanishing point but it's quite close.
rotated boxes- solid, especially for a beginner
organic perspective- looks fine, although you seemed to struggle with some of the smaller boxes. also there aren't many variations in the angles of your boxes.
Mainly, you need to work on your confidence in ghosting and drawing the line.Next Steps:
to improve your confidence in your lines i would like you to:
-split a sheet in half. on one half, repeat the ghosted lines exercise. make sure to draw from your shoulder, and ghost the line at least 5 times before drawing it. your main focus is to be confident and quick in your lines- the dots just provide a framework for ghosting.
on the second half, after drawing the ghosted lines, do the ghosted planes again. remember to apply the same techniques in ghosted lines for this exercise.
Good luck!
7:14 PM, Friday January 26th 2024
https://imgur.com/a/2KrVJvZ ty for critiquing my work
1:49 AM, Sunday January 28th 2024
Great! There is a marked improvement in your line making here. You're ready to move on
Next Steps:
Good luck on the 250 boxes challenge! remember to keep in mind the ghosting techniques here as you draw the boxes
7:26 PM, Thursday January 25th 2024
Solid review man. However it is called "ellipses in planes" not "ghosted ellipses"
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