Done with all the lessons for lesson 1. I know i'm not that great at the ellipses so any advice there would be greatly appreciated. Also, I get a bit lost on the organic perspective. Theres some boxes that i feel like i get the concept and do really good then when i try to draw it a different way or at a different angle, I get a bit lost again. Any tips will be greatly appreciated.
Thanks!
Ginger
Hi, and welcome! Let’s see~
Your superimposed lines look good: smooth, properly lined up at the start, and of a consistent trajectory (mostly.) The only exception are those zig-zagy/cloudy ones. For those, each shift in trajectory should’ve been handled as a different line, instead. The ghosted lines/planes look quite good, too. They’re confident, and you’ve filled your page to the brim. One thing I’d like to point out is that they’re sometimes a little wobbly at the end. Remember that your main goal isn’t for them to stop at the correct end point, but rather be smooth, and straight. Anything else is having your priorities backwards.
The table of ellipses exercise is… not great. For starters, your ellipses are often stiff/wobbly. This is likely due to their size, so I’ll recommend sticking to bigger ones, from now on. Second, remember that ellipses in a frame share a degree/angle, and that they need to make an effort to touch all sides of the frame, rather than floating inside of it. Finally, be sure to go around all of them 2-3 times; this is regardless of how they turn out. The ellipses in planes exercise has similar issues, mainly: wobbly ellipses, bumpy ellipses, and ellipses that have been drawn through too much. Similarly, in the funnels exercise, you seem more focused with the accuracy of the ellipses (whether they’re snug, whether they’re lined up to the minor axis), than their confidence, but that’s not quite right. Thankfully, save for the (admittedly major) issue of confidence, the ellipses look fine, so you’ll be good to go as soon as we take care of that.
The plotted perspective exercise looks clean- nice work. The rough perspective exercise looks quite good, too. I can tell that you spent a lot of time considering your points, though I do wish the linework had been a little cleaner. Try not to correct an incorrect line, if you can. The boxes in the rotated boxes exercise don’t quite rotate, but this is expected. What’s important is that the exercise has been seen through to the end. As a bonus, the gaps between your boxes are mostly narrow, and you’ve taken the time to apply some lineweight/hatching, too. Finally, the organic perspective exercise looks nice. Your boxes properly follow the flow line, while increasing in size, and maintaining a consistent trajectory. As a result, they convey the illusion of flow quite well- nicely done.
Before I send you off to the box challenge, I’d like to see the following:
Next Steps:
1 page of the table of ellipses exercise, where your main concern is in their smoothness/roundness, and only after that’s taken care of do you allow yourself to consider their accuracy. Remember to maintain a consistent degree/angle in a frame, and draw through them the correct number of times. Good luck!
Thank you so much for the review! very helpful! everything you mentioned working on and areas of less confidence you hit the nail on the head. so thank you for the feedback. I'll redo the tables of ellipses and apply you input. thanks again for the thorough review!
So this is my 3rd try at this today. I feel like ita gotten better...ish...but I find it odd that I have a tendency for the top or bottom of my ellipsis to have a wobble in it...if you have advice on how to fix that or what causes the please pass it along! thank you again for your review hopefully these look better!
table of ellipses take 2 :)
Ok, first things first, 1 page means 1 page, not 1 good page, and certainly not 2 pages. Remember that what you’re doing here is just showing me that you understand what I told you, and are making an effort to apply it, not necessarily applying it successfully. Beyond that, any time spent on this assignment is time wasted, and I’d recommend not wasting your time if you can help it.
In regards to the pages themselves, they look good. Your ellipses are quite a bit more confident, and you’ve been careful about how they fit in their frames, too. The thing you mentioned is the only thing that still needs a little work, and it can be one of two things. If it’s the first mark you make, it means that you’re still a little stiff when committing to the mark (transitioning from the ghosting motion to the actual markmaking motion), and need to work on that. Simply tell yourself that there’s nothing else you can do, at that point, and whatever mark you’ll make, you’ll make. If it’s the last mark you make, then it’s a case of you being a little too conscious of the fact that the nature of the mark will change as you pull your pen off the page, and trying to compensate for it. To fix that, as well as another issue I notice, of your ellipses having a bit of a tail to them, I’ll recommend not actually flicking your pen off the page at the end, but rather lifting it off, maintaining the ghosting motion until it’s off. So the order would go something like: ghost, slowly lower the pen, draw, slowly lift the pen, end the ghosting motion. Make sense?
Anyway, I’ll be marking this lesson as complete, so work on these in your own time, during your warmups. For now, head on over to the box challenge. Good luck!
Next Steps:
250 box challenge
thank you for the review its been very helpful!
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