6:04 PM, Tuesday February 4th 2020
Hi there! First of all, sorry to hear you haven't gotten critique on this lesson before, I don't check reddit, but me and more people are quite active on discord, so if you join, we could check your homework there, (and you can post it as you finish each page to get faster feedback you can apply to your next pages). But well, onto your submission!
Starting with your arrows, they flow nicely, but you are repeating some lines. Remember that just like in previous lesson 1 exercises, you should ghost and draw your lines with a single confident stroke, no more.
Your shading is a bit messy as well, remember to plan it too, don't rush it.
And lastly, with your addition of lineweight, it should be done with a single superimposed confident line, ghosted. Don't repeat it more than once, and be sure your mark is confident (I've seen yours are a bit wobbly).
Your sausages have some problems, although you are mainly managing to keep them as simple sausages, the sausage shape itself has a bit of wobble at times, remember that here as well, confidence > accuracy.
And the same goes specially to your contours, they are wobbly, again, don't worry about accuracy, focus on confidence first, if the contours get outside of the sausage, it doesn't matter. You are aware of the shifting of the ellipses on the sausages themselves, so good job on that!
Onto your textures, you are focusing a bit too much on the contours, remember that in this exercise you only have to draw cast shadows, nothing else. So you don't need to draw all the contours of the forms you can see.
And I see you might have been scribbling a bit, remember that in this exercise you should be looking and copying something specific of the texture you are seeing before every tiny little mark you make on your drawing.
You can check the new updated material on lesson 2 textures, it will probably help a lot. And if you do choose to do the texture challenge, start with the texture mentioned on the new article, crumpled paper.
Same goes for your dissecitions, here as well focus on shadows. You are wrapping them around the contours nicely, and you are using use of the silouette as well to show the textures, so it's only that issue you have.
Onto your form intersections, you've mostly done a good job with keeping the forms on a consistent foreshortening, although here you have as well wobbling and repeating line issues in all your forms.
Again, always ghost each mark, and try to make it as confident as you can. If the accuracy is off, don't repeat it, keep going as if the line was correct.
Lastly in your organic intersections, they look mostly believable as 3d forms interacting with each other.
Nevertheless, you aren't drawing the spine of the forms before drawing them, and you got 1 or 2 forms that aren't quite stable. Before adding new forms, try to imagine how they fall on other forms, and how their final position would be.
The relationships between all sausages isn't that clear as well, don't forget to add lineweight and shadows to clarify the relationships between every sausage. As you can see here for example, adding lineweight to clarify that one form is behind the other (as always with a single confided ghosted line). And here an example of a place where you didn't place the shadows.
Lastly, remember that the placement of the little ellipse at the sausages is meant to be the tip of the ending or starting ball of the sausage, used to mark where the sausage is looking at. I think some of yours are a bit off. (So take it in mind on your next organic forms exercises as well)
Next Steps:
Overall I think you've done a good job, but I want to make sure before marking it as complete that you understand the confidence of lines thing before going on, so I want to do the following:
-1 page of forms with contour ellipses and 1 page of forms with contour curves
-1 page of form intersections.
Be sure you draw every mark confidently and ghosting, and that you don't repeat any line of them.