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5:23 PM, Tuesday January 30th 2024

https://imgur.com/user/kendalgreer

Hi Tofu... Hope this works.

Kendal

7:12 PM, Tuesday January 30th 2024

Ok. I am having difficulty with Imgur and getting a link to view my work.

Does this work for you?

https://imgur.com/user/kendalgreer/posts

7:26 PM, Tuesday January 30th 2024
9:10 PM, Tuesday January 30th 2024

Uncomfortable gave me the go ahead on this link.

Looks like the second link (https://imgur.com/a/Uwh20CE) is what you wanted, so feel free to pass that onto Tofu.

12:35 AM, Wednesday January 31st 2024

This link works, thanks.

You're making progress towards understanding the concepts introduced in this lesson and hopefully this critique will help you in your future attempts.

  • Starting off in the arrows section your lines are looking smoothly and confidently drawn. You're doing a good job maintaining a consistent width as your arrows widen while moving closer to the viewer and with more mileage you'll become more consistent. You're doing a good job maintaining a consistent width as your arrows widen while moving closer to the viewer and with more mileage you'll become more consistent. Great use of foreshortening so far, by utilizing it in both the arrows themselves as well as the negative space between their curves we can create a stronger illusion of an arrow moving through 3D space as you can see demonstrated here.

  • Moving into the organic forms with contours exercise some of your forms are getting a bit too complex or too simple to the point they're nearly ellipses. We want to create our forms with both ends being the same size and to avoid any pinching, bloating, or stretching along the form's length as discussed here. I would also encourage you to draw fewer forms overall but make them larger, drawing larger will help you become more comfortable working from the shoulder, encourage patience and make it easier to reflect on any mistakes you make. You're keeping your line work confident here which is great, if you feel uncomfortable working with contours still don't stress with more mileage it'll become more natural. Speaking of contours I'd like you to try and shift the degree of your contours more. The degree of a contour line basically represents the orientation of that cross-section in space, relative to the viewer, and as we slide along the sausage form, the cross section is either going to open up (allowing us to see more of it) or turn away from the viewer (allowing us to see less), as shown here.

  • In the texture exercises you're focusing largely on outlines, form shadows, and negative space rather than cast shadows created by forms along the texture itself. This makes it difficult to create gradients with implied information which we could then use to create focal points in more complex pieces, by doing so we can prevent our viewers from being visually overwhelmed with too much detail. For more on the importance of focusing on cast shadows read here. I'd also like to quickly direct you to this image which shows that when we're working with thin line like textures if we outline and fill the shadow we will create a much more dynamic texture than simply drawing lines.

  • It's quite common for people to feel like they don't fully grasp the form intersections exercise, if you feel like you may fall into this category try not to stress too much. This exercise is just meant to get students to start thinking about how their forms relate to one another in 3D space, and how to define those relationships on the page. We'll be going over them more in the upcoming lessons. Your forms are largely looking pretty solid here which is good to see, that being said you are making multiple groups of forms per page at times when we asked that it be one large group of intersecting forms. I'll also point you to this diagram which will hopefully clarify the task a bit more as you aren't always creating new edges in your intersections and instead just highlight existing edges.

  • While wrapping up your submission with the organic intersections exercise you show that you need a bit more time becoming comfortable with thinking of how these forms interact in 3D space and how they'd wrap around one another. Currently you're mostly drawing forms over one another rather than wrapping them believably around the forms below. You're keeping your forms simple and easy to work with which is a good strategy to help produce good results. As for shadows it appears like you're mostly drawing form shadows rather than cast shadows. It appears like your shadows aren't following a consistent light source, I recommend pushing your light source to the top left or right corner of the page to start with, it's easier than working with a light directly above your form pile.

Overall this was a solid submission, while you may have some things to work on I have no doubt you will improve with more mileage. I'll be marking your submission as complete and move you on to the next lesson.

Keep practicing previous exercises as warm ups and good luck in lesson 3!

Next Steps:

Keep practicing previous exercise as warm ups.

Move on to lesson 3.

This critique marks this lesson as complete.
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