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9:25 PM, Wednesday November 8th 2023

Hi, my name is Rob and I'm a teaching assistant with drawabox who will be handling your lesson one critique. I need access to your google drive to be able to see your submission. Please reply back when you've granted it. Thanks!

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Hi, my name is Rob and I'm a teaching assistant with drawabox who will be handling your lesson one critique. I need access to your google drive to be able to see your submission. Please reply back when you've granted it. Thanks!

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12:43 AM, Thursday November 9th 2023

Hi, give it a try now .

10:23 PM, Thursday November 9th 2023

Yep, it works now. Starting with your superimposed lines these are off to a fine start. You are keeping a clearly defined starting point with all of your wavering at the opposite end. Your ghosted lines and planes turned out well. You are using the ghosting method to good effect to get confident linework with a pretty decent deal of accuracy that will get better and better with practice.

Your tables of ellipses are coming along well. You are doing a good job drawing through your ellipses and focusing on a consistent smooth ellipse shape. This is carried over nicely into your ellipses in planes although you are deforming some of your ellipses at times. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/17/deformed You are compromising your overall ellipse shape by adjusting for accuracy midstroke. Try and rely a bit more on the muscle memory of the motion you build up while ghosting and almost make your mark without thinking. This will be less accurate at first. Although accuracy is our end goal it can't really be forced and tends to come through mileage and consistent practice more than anything. Your ellipses in funnels are looking smoother overall but you are slightly tilting your ellipses off the minor axis at times. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/18/notaligned This is something you should always consider when drawing your ellipses. There is room for improvement when it comes to your ellipses both in terms of overall consistency of shape and smoothness so make sure you keep practicing these in your warmups as they can take a while to get used to.

The plotted perspective looks good although for some reason you reverted back to drawing freehand for adding lineweight when you were supposed to use a ruler for the entire exercise. Please make sure to fully follow the instructions for these exercise otherwise you may be assigned revisions. Your rough perspective exercises turned out pretty good. It's great that you are keeping up with the confident linework on these. I am noticing that you are redrawing lines on occasion and this is a habit you should try and get out of. Try and stick with the initial line you put down even if it's a bit off. Adding more lines just makes things messier and harder to read. I do have some notes regarding added line weight I'd like to share. If you want to add line weight make sure you don't revert back to using your wrist and are drawing from your shoulder with confidence. Also added line weight should be subtle so try and only go over a line one additional time instead of multiple times. You are also doing a good job extending the lines back on your boxes to check your work. As you can see some of your perspective estimations were quite off but that will become more intuitive with practice. One thing that can help you a bit when doing a one point perspective exercise like this is to realize that all of your horizontal lines should be parallel to the horizon line and all of your verticals should be perpendicular(straight up and down in this case) to the horizon line. This will help you avoid some of the slanting lines you have in your constructions.

Your revised rotated box exercise turned out pretty well. I like that you drew this nice and big as that really helps when dealing with complex spatial problems. You also did a good job drawing through your boxes and keeping your gaps narrow and consistent. While the rotations here aren't perfect this was a good effort overall. The more you draw and develop your spatial thinking ability the easier these rotations are to handle. This is a great exercise to come back to after a few lessons to see how much your spatial thinking ability has improved. Your organic perspective exercises are looking pretty good. You seem to be getting comfortable using the ghosting method and drawing from your shoulder for confident linework which is great. That being said your redrawing lines and added line weight for these pages is definitely NOT what we are trying to do. Our goal is to be able to put down a single confident line and then leave it alone. By consistently redrawing lines and reverting back to using your wrist to add line weight you are just reinforcing bad habits. I'm not going to assign a revision for this because I can see you can clearly put down confident linework when you need to be but keep this in mind moving forwards. Your box constructions are fairly solid for the most part and I can see you are developing a sense for how box lines converge to vps. There are still some wonky convergences here and there so the 250 box challenge will be a great next step for you.

Overall this was a solid submission that showed a good deal of growth. Your line confidence and ellipses are both coming along well. Keep practicing those ellipses during your warmups and remember that a smooth confident line is our current priority and you don't need to be constantly redrawing lines or adding line weight. Otherwise, I think you are understanding most of the concepts these lessons are trying to convey quite well. I'm going to mark this as complete and good luck with the 250 box challenge. Keep up the good work!

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3:06 PM, Friday November 10th 2023

thanks !

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