Hey, Lunando here. Let's get right to it.
Lines
In your Superimposed Lines I sometimes noticed some fraying on both ends. Try to avoid that by placing your pen carefully before each line. Moving on to your Ghosted Lines here it's quite obvious that you have a bit of a problem with wobbly lines, this can be seen all throughout your submission and is definitely something that you need to work on. Our main goal is to produce confident and smooth flowing lines, in the beginning that is our main focus. Always confidence over accuracy. Wobbling can have two main reasons: 1 you're not drawing mainly with your shoulder but rather relying too much on your wrist and elbow, or you don't ghost enough/execute the line not fast enough, leading to wobbly unconfident lines. Same goes for the Ghosted Planes although there's some improvement already.
Ellipses
In your Tables of Ellipses it looks like you went through your Ellipses more than 3 times. Your Ellipses here are pretty messy and uneven, this is already getting better in your Ellipses in Planes but here it is important to mention again: confidence/smoothness over accuracy, better to have a confident ellipse not fitting in the plane than a wobbly uneven one touching all four sides. Same goes for your Funnels where you've generally done good job changing the degree of your Ellipses but in terms of smoothness there's lots of room for improvement. Take your time! Ghost a lot and then with one confident movement go through your Ellipse two times, maybe try to do the motion a bit faster. Look what works best for you.
Boxes
Plotted Perspective looks good! Your Rough Perspective apart from the mentioned line issues as well! Regarding Rotated Boxes : You've done quite well in keeping your gaps between the boxes consistent. In terms of drawing through your boxes, however, you missed quite a bit in the back. Just like the front faces form a half sphere of squares divided by equal gaps, there should be a similar half sphere in the back. Yours looks almost flat. Take a look at Uncomfortable's example again, and you'll see what I mean. Moving on to your Organic Perspective, these are done quite nicely! Your linework is definitely improving. There are a few perspective issues, but you'll have plenty of time to work on them in the 250 Box Challenge.
Next Steps:
So before I send you into the 250 Box Challenge I would like to see from you the following:
-1 additional Page of Ghosted Lines focusing on confidence, smoothness and drawing from your shoulder.
Have fun and see you soon ;D
Hello Lunando. Thank you for your critique!
I apologise for a late response. I was unable to upload my resubmission sooner.
I have done additional exercise pages as requested, but personally I'm not sure whether they are a significant improvement in comparison to my initial submission. About 50% of ghosted lines are still rather wobbly, despite putting more focus on making the line straight and confident.
I also did Table of Ellipses going only two times, but I still struggle with making the ellipses smooth and connect with initial line - making them still rather messy.
Anyway, any feedback is much appreciated.
Hey, it looks like you've posted the link to your original submission and not the one with the additional pages or am I missing something?
Oh, I haven't notice that. Sorry for that.
Like the Staedtlers, these also come in a set of multiple weights - the ones we use are F. One useful thing in these sets however (if you can't find the pens individually) is that some of the sets come with a brush pen (the B size). These can be helpful in filling out big black areas.
Still, I'd recommend buying these in person if you can, at a proper art supply store. They'll generally let you buy them individually, and also test them out beforehand to weed out any duds.
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