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2:54 AM, Tuesday August 16th 2022

Cool, thank you for your review. I have tried different variations with leaves with edge detail and more complexity I just never know if I should submit the first time I did the exercise or the most recent. I also definitely got cheeky with the branches and tried to do them with one stroke. I'll try to constrain my lines more to their forms and be more deliberate for the next exercises and revisions.

1:51 PM, Tuesday August 16th 2022

I would recommend reviewing this video from Lesson 0, to get a refresher on exactly how you ought to be tackling the homework.

11:01 PM, Tuesday August 16th 2022

I had forgotten about the warm-up bit about only including exercises into your pool only after you've completed the lesson.

https://imgur.com/a/pu8pomE

Also, more branches? I feel like I did better on the leaves, but I feel iffy about that page of branches.

6:20 PM, Wednesday August 17th 2022

Your branches are definitely doing better, as you're following the instructions and building up the edges with separate strokes. There are definitely cases where your segments don't extend fully halfway to the next ellipse, so keep an eye on that, but in general you're doing well. Also, don't forget that the ellipses' degree should be getting wider as we move farther away from the viewer, as discussed back in Lesson 1's ellipses video.

As to your leaves, it seems you may not have gone through the provided instructions as carefully as you ought to have. As shown here there are two main issues:

  • You frequently skip constructional steps, jumping into more complexity than the existing structure can handle initially. You can see this explained here, and you'll find an example of another more complex leaf structure here.

  • You still appear to be zigzagging some edge detail, rather than building it up one mark at a time, rising off and returning to the existing structure. In a number of these you didn't really have an existing structure to build off due to the first point, although on the bottom right we can see a more usual case of this mistake. Towards the bottom left (where I also marked out zigzagging) it appears that you may have tried to draw these as separate additions, but they still appeared to flow into one another, creating the same general result of replacing previous phase of construction or otherwise weakening the relationship between those phases of construction. I linked these notes on the issue previously, though if you have questions about it feel free to ask.

I'd like you to do one more page of leaves.

Next Steps:

Please submit one more page of leaves.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
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