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9:50 AM, Friday June 16th 2023
Hello, I’ll be doing your critique today!
Organic Arrows
Good sense of depth, especially on the second page. the hatching is done quite well too.
Organic forms with contour lines
The ellipses rotate although some of them (mainly the ones at the edge) could use more rotation based on the line
The contours aren’t confident, did you try to ghost an ellipse before drawing it? some of them don’t rotate as they should and a lot of them aren’t overshooting so that might be contributing to the issue. This might help you understand my point:
https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/77f2ca1c.jpg
Texture
The texture analysis is very nicely done! I really like how you handled the brick and the scales.
The dark side seems to be a bit too thick for your gradation making it appear like the texture should be darker there, but the light side is perfect
Dissections
More good looking textures here, I love how some of them interact with each other.
Form Intersections
Good variety of shapes, but it isn’t clear where the intersections are, if there are any. The linework is really light.
https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/8d4a68c8.jpg
Organic Intersections
You’re not supposed to put shadows on the form that is creating them and some shadows look a bit awkward
https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/516f8d4f.jpg
You'll get better as you go on, but intersections, ellipses, and organic forms are really important in the later lessons so i just want to know if you understand the concept and you can move on
Next Steps:
I'd like you do do another page of the organic intersections, keep these things in mind:
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How the forms interact with each other (Imagine tetris but with sausages)
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How the contours curve around each form and how they change their angle based on that (try to ghost and overshoot the contours)
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How the shadows interact with what's under it (Line weight is fine but focus on the shadows for now)
Can you also send a more clear picture of your form intersections? I really can't where the intersections are.
3:38 PM, Thursday June 29th 2023
9:59 PM, Thursday June 29th 2023
The revision seems better, they stack more naturally now and the perspective is nice too.
The intersections are fine as well.
Remember to keep practising the completed lessons and good luck on your journey!
Next Steps:
Move on to the next Lesson, and don't forget about the 50-50 rule
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