Alrighty! So starting with your form intersections, you are doing a good job of pinning down a lot of the intersections between the forms themselves. There are two key issues to keep working on though:
Your boxes definitely need more time investment from you - it seems you're not necessarily thinking about how to orient each line in relation to the other members of its same set (the ones that share a vanishing point), to keep them converging consistently. As a result, your boxes tend to come out a little wonky each time. It doesn't necessarily stand out too much here, but when we get into the actual object constructions later, it will pose a bigger issue. Be sure to continue practicing those freely rotated box exercises from the box challenge (along with line extensions) as part of your warmups to improve on this.
Your lineweights aren't generally put in the ideal spots. You've got some cases like this where you seem to be darkening random lines, and then in the other cases you're just making the intersection lines darker. Instead, your line weight needs to be used to clarify specific overlaps between forms - basically wherever one form is in front of another. Add line weight with a confident stroke, making the ends taper to blend more seamlessly into the existing marks, rather than pressing as hard as you are now. And lastly, try to be more subtle with that line weight.
Moving onto your actual object constructions, there are a few issues, but overall you are moving in the right direction here. You're demonstrating a good grasp of how to use subdivisions, and how to use this kind of planning to your advantage when building out your objects.
The first issue I want to mention is a pretty small one - using different colours can be very useful when it comes to things like the subdivided boxes from the "advanced" box challenge section, but in your actual object constructions I do want you to stick with one colour. Reason being, I don't want you to separate the "construction" from the object - especially when you get further, into lesson 7. Yes, it results in a mess of lines, but ultimately learning how to see through the forest and to leverage line weight to clarify that mess is a useful skill. Note that I did mention in the section on tools that you shouldn't be switching your pens. By sticking with one kind of pen, we avoid redrawing lines that are already part of the construction, and end up treating every step of the drawing the same way, instead of thinking in terms of construction, followed by "the real drawing".
Another issue is that in a number of situations - though not all - your boxes definitely don't lay the best foundation. You've got cases where the edges aren't converging in the right direction, or where the boxes come out skewed. While I am quite happy that you adhere to the skewed box anyway instead of trying to correct it (correcting it would make things worse), continuing to practice those freely rotated boxes with line extensions as I mentioned before will help a lot.
Thirdly, one thing that probably will help you to avoid really cramped messes where the lines are indiscernable is to simply draw bigger. This toilet for example could have been at least twice as big, giving you way more room to solve spatial problems, and just to see what you're doing.
Also worth noting - the proportions on that toilet were waaaay off, though fortunately proportions are something we'll look into more closely in Lesson 7. They're not a huge priority right now.
You did catch this mistake yourself (as it was quite obvious), but examples like the handle orientation here just show that you need to always think about all the lines the one you're about to draw is meant to run parallel with in 3D space. Mistakes like that occur when we get ahead of ourselves, and draw without thinking as much as we should. Of course, the freedom to use rulers here should make that a lot easier.
So! All in all, you've got some issues, but they're fairly minor. You're still headed in the right direction, so I'll go ahead and mark this lesson as complete.
Next Steps:
Move onto the 25 wheel challenge, which is a prerequisite for lesson 7.
Hello Uncomfortable,
I definitely agree I should draw much bigger and I need a lot more box practice. I was doing my constructions using a single purple pen, but I quickly lost place when I would come back to my work hours later. This resulted in me scrapping many pages. I attempted to stick to purple for box construction, green for extended boxes, and red for the actual object. Still, drawing larger would have been more helpful. This is definitely due to drawing too small. Big oof. I really see the issues with my toilet and the fridge handles. Thanks for pointing it out. When I draw for fun, I realize my proportions are still crap. I just need more caffeeine and practice.
Thanks for the critique,
Lars
Like the Staedtlers, these also come in a set of multiple weights - the ones we use are F. One useful thing in these sets however (if you can't find the pens individually) is that some of the sets come with a brush pen (the B size). These can be helpful in filling out big black areas.
Still, I'd recommend buying these in person if you can, at a proper art supply store. They'll generally let you buy them individually, and also test them out beforehand to weed out any duds.
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