Lesson 2: Contour Lines, Texture and Construction
4:05 PM, Thursday May 12th 2022
Submission for lesson 2.
I'll be the TA handling your Lesson 2 critique.
You're making progress towards understanding the concepts introduced in this lesson and hopefully this critique will help you in your future attempts.
Starting off in the arrows section your lines are looking smoothly and confidently drawn. You're doing a good job maintaining a consistent width as your arrows widen while moving closer to the viewer and with more mileage you'll become more consistent. This is a good exercise to experiment with line weight but when applying it we want to make sure we do subtly to key areas like overlaps to give clarity to our forms. Here are some things to look out for when applying line weight, and here are some reminders on how to apply it subtly. I'd like you to experiment more with foreshortening in your future attempts, by utilizing it in both the arrows themselves as well as the negative space between their curves we can create a stronger illusion of an object moving through 3D space as demonstrated here.
Moving into the organic forms with contours exercise some of your forms are getting a bit too complex. We want to create our forms with both ends being the same size and to avoid any pinching, bloating, or stretching along the form's length as discussed here. You're keeping your line work confident here which is great, if you feel uncomfortable working with contours still don't stress with more mileage it'll become more natural. Speaking of contours I'd like you to try and shift the degree of your contours more. The degree of a contour line basically represents the orientation of that cross-section in space, relative to the viewer, and as we slide along the sausage form, the cross section is either going to open up (allowing us to see more of it) or turn away from the viewer (allowing us to see less), as shown here.
In the texture section you're demonstrating good observational skills by being able to separate and clearly focus on the cast shadows formed along your reference. You're doing a good job of transitioning your gradients from dark to light as well rather than having sudden changes. Before moving on to the next section I'd like to quickly point you to this image which shows that when working with thin line like textures we benefit from outlining and filling the shadow's shape rather than just drawing a line. We get much more dynamic and interesting results this way. Remember that each texture is it's own challenge so be sure to experiment with different types when practicing this exercise in the future.
It's quite common for people to feel like they don't fully grasp the form intersections exercise, if you feel like you may fall into this category try not to stress too much. This exercise is just meant to get students to start thinking about how their forms relate to one another in 3D space, and how to define those relationships on the page. We'll be going over them more in the upcoming lessons.Your forms are looking quite solid here and they believably appear to belong in the same cohesive 3D space, good work.
While wrapping up your submission with the organic intersections exercise you do a great job demonstrating that your sense of 3D space is developing as your forms begin to wrap around each other believably. You're keeping your forms simple and easy to work with which is a good strategy to help produce good results. When it comes to your shadows you're pushing them enough so that they cast rather than just hugging the form that creates them which is a great start. Your shadows appear to be following a consistent light source, be sure to experiment with different angles and intensities when trying this exercise again in the future. I recommend pushing your light source to the top left or right corner of the page to start with, it's easier than working with a light directly above your form pile.
Overall this was a solid submission, while you may have some things to work on I have no doubt you will improve with more mileage. I'll be marking your submission as complete and move you on to the next lesson.
Keep practicing previous exercises as warm ups and good luck in lesson 3!
Keep practicing previous exercise as warm ups.
Move on to lesson 3.
Hi, Thanks for the critique, Ill make sure to keep this all in mind. I just hast have some quick inquiries.
Before lesson 3. is it alright for me to do the challenges first?
I want to try doing Cylinder, wheel and chest challenge before lesson 3. Would that be alright?
If you were to start any of the challenges it would be the texture challenge and I recommend you tackle it slowly while doing other lesson work, maybe a texture a week.
The cylinder challenge is for after you've completed lesson 5 and before lesson 6. The wheel challenge is between lesson 6 and 7. As for the chest challenge it's for after you've completed lesson 7 as it's a design challenge.
I of course can't stop you from trying them but we highly recommend not doing them just yet. Lesson 1, the box challenge and lesson 2 are introductions to tools you'll be using and lesson 3 is when you begin to use them with more intent. Tackling additional challenges right now just risks burn out.
Another thing to keep in mind is that if you do try them they wouldn't qualify for submission seeing as how you're meant to submit work to the best of your current abilities and by the time you get to those challenges you should be much better at them after tackling the upcoming lessons.
Hope that clears things up, if not feel free to for more clarification.
Ah okay, I misunderstood, I thought those challenges were after I finished lesson 2.
Alright, will follow your recommendation regarding the challenges. Just a clarification if I do got to finish the texture challenge first before lesson 3. Would my submission for texture challenge be qualified for official submission ?