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2:56 PM, Friday October 15th 2021

You're doing a good job on the extreme boxes but on the shallow perspective boxes you're still having problems with convergence. Each set of parallel lines has to converge into a single point, and some of your lines do the opposite, they diverge and get farther away as you extend them. It's important that you learn to make this well consistently.

I've also seen you've done the revisions quite quickly. Make sure you take your time on each box and analyze each step to do a result as good as you can get it. It's easy to start thinking about finishing being the goal when you're told to do a certain number of things, but try not to think about it and shift your goal towards fixing the issues that you're having.

Lastly I've seen that you tend to repeat some lines that were off, and that you rush your hatching sometimes, make sure you always take your time with them and that you don't repeat lines.

So before moving on I want you to do 5 more shallow boxes. Make sure you focus on making each set of lines converge. Good luck and feel free to ask any questions if you have them.

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5 more boxes with shallow foreshortening

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8:16 PM, Friday October 15th 2021

Hello! I got done the Boxes you asked, and this time I spent alot of slow thinking and took extra time ghosting my lines so that I'm not in a mindset to rush, but in that time I'm noticing a difficulty of mine that might be related to why I'm diverging. With these boxes when actually thinking about my pairs of lines, I notice I don't have a good sense of what counts as a shallow convergence and an extreme one in terms of which direction the line heads. The extreme boxes might've been easier for me because I was able to just push the line inwards enough to where my line obviously looks like it's converging from the getgo and make quick convergences. This is not the case with shallow foreshortening. In order to keep things shallow I tend to try to avoid pushing it inwards, despite the point being that 3pp boxes always converge. It's difficult trying to gauge what will avoid divergence but what will also avoid too quick of convergence, kinda like a balancing act. This is probably why my convergences here turn out too quick compared to what you've asked this assignment around.

9:37 PM, Sunday October 17th 2021

They're better again but like you said they're pretty much extreme perspective. You can use the method I gave you on the discord to check the lines are actually converging, and by ghosting before drawing the lines you're making sure they converge and not diverge. If they diverge you can just place other dot. There is no need to do the lines in one shot, take as much time as you need.

That said, just make sure you practice more shallow boxes from now on on your warmups regularly. Shallow boxes are very important, and they will start getting very important during the course as well as you get to the form intersections exercise on lesson 2, and that's an exercise that will repeat throughout the course several times.

That said, good luck on lesson 2! Keep it up!

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lesson 2

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