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1:39 AM, Sunday February 12th 2023
Congrats on completing your first biggest challenge of this course! I'm Giuldzap (also known as Fervent Heroes on the discord server) and i'll be critiquing your work today.
Good job in maintaining lines confident! I've observed a great amount of line weight applied, but see some boxes that don't have it (like 246). And bonus points on hatching one side of the box. Also, I do notice a major improvement in your boxes at your 5th page!
Onto the negatives...
Extended lines are going in the wrong direction.
Like in boxes 9, 19, 20, 21, 23, 33, 51, 53, 59, 135, 142 has missing extending lines, 149, 150, 163, 175, 178, 181, 196, 201, 204, and many more. Extended lines must face AWAY from the viewer.
The boxes convergences are diverging away from the vanishing point. In 3 point perspective boxes, all 4 lines ALWAYS converge at least a little to one vanishing point. Here's a more clear guide to making better convergences: https://imgur.com/3zoQA65
After your 60th box your boxes do start to become more parallel and almost diverge.
In some case, i've observed that you place your boxes in random areas that makes it overlap with other boxes' extended lines. (like in page with box 191-195) Which can get more confusing since they're one color. Try to keep enough breathing space for each box to have their lines extended.
It almost seems like you didn't learn from your mistakes. Mistakes that happened in your initial pages were still made even towards your last boxes. By the end of every page and after extending lines, you should make mental notes on mistakes you've made. Perhaps "in X case i will converge more outwards", etc.
Overall a decent foundation from lesson one but some major difficulty on following instructions. into the submission. I'll have to ask for a revision.
Next Steps:
24 more boxes (4 pages). Re-read the instructions so that you do them right!
7:32 AM, Monday February 13th 2023
Hello, thanks for critiquing my work! I regret not asking for help earlier, though I wished to finish beforehand. I took in what you said about making better convergences, and decided to draw less boxes in almost every page in an effort to make them breathe.
1:39 PM, Monday February 13th 2023
Okay, i think you did do this probably too rushed. I forgot to mention that you should limit yourself to doing one page a day and not all 4 pages, that was a mistake on my end.
I understand that you want to quickly go through things, but you shouldn't do that and lower your possibilities of getting a better quality of box. Plus, while hatching is optional, the downside is that a box can look like it's extended in the wrong way, so keep that in mind.
But, this is good enough, you can move on.
Also before you go here's a guide that can help out on your inner corner problem: https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/365180330103013388/892934905800052826/image0.png
Next Steps:
Keep on practicing boxes as warm up and feel free to begin Lesson 2
8:19 PM, Monday February 13th 2023
I actually did split it between two days, but I understand where you're coming from, thanks!
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